Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The graph illustrat information about the population in the four countries of Asia in 1970 to 2020 and also giving predictions for 2030 and 2040 that how this population will be in future .

In 1970 Philippines and Malaysia is at same level there population was 30 percent .Moreover in 1980 the population of Philippines get changed little bit from 30 to 31 perent while on other hand Malaysia population was high than Philippinesit was about 40 percent ,In 1990 both countries were having same population it was about 50 percent further in 2000 Philippines population again droped and came to 48 percent and again Malaysia population increasd to 60 percent furthermore in 2010 both countries were having different population Philipines population was dropping slowly and Malaysia population was increasd and reached to70 percent 2020 Philipines increasd slowly to 45 percent and Malaysia was highest about 80 percent of population The predictions of Philippines and malaysia in 2030 and 2040 are they will increas.

Thailand and Indonesia both countries in 1970 are at same position and having 19 percent population than slowly incresed in 1980 and 1990 and the population was rising same in 2000 both countries were having 29 percent population and in 2010 a huge change come in the population of indonesia it rise up to 40 percent while Thiland population was at same level as it was in 2000 ,The predictions of these both countries in 2030 and 2040 are they will rise up and in 2040 Thiland population will reach to 49 percent and Indonesia population will be 60 percent.

In conclusion,all the four countries population will be increasd in future.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the countries and cover both historical data and forecasts, and you note the broad future rise. However, the response only partially reports the graph’s main features: it gives no clear overview of the countries’ contrasting overall trajectories or final ranking. Several comparisons and figures are inaccurate: the Philippines and Malaysia were not at the same level in 1970 (about 32% and 30%), nor were they equal in 1990 (about 48% and 46%). Thailand and Indonesia were also not both at 19% in 1970, and Indonesia rose to about 43% in 2010 rather than 40%. The forecast figures for 2040 are also understated. Select the most important trends and check comparisons against the graph.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall arrangement: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two pairs of countries, and a concluding sentence. This helps the reader follow the broad subject. However, progression within the paragraphs is weakened by very long sentences that join many years and comparisons together, often with commas or repeated connectors such as “and,” “while,” and “furthermore.” The reference in “this population” is also unclear, and the conclusion merely repeats that all countries will increase rather than summarising the main contrasts. Use shorter sentences to group key periods, and make each paragraph’s comparisons explicit—for example, contrast Malaysia’s strong rise with the Philippines’ fluctuation.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing trends, including “predictions,” “droped,” “increasd,” “rising,” and “reach,” so the reader can generally understand the intended changes. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “population,” “same level,” and “rise up.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, such as “illustrat,” “perent,” “Philipines,” and “Thiland,” alongside imprecise expressions like “a huge change come.” These errors sometimes make the account harder to read. Build a more accurate set of trend terms and use them precisely, such as “urban proportion,” “fluctuated,” “climbed,” and “remained relatively stable.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to connect ideas using clauses and time references, but sentence structures are limited and many extended sentences are not controlled accurately. For example, “In 1970 Philippines and Malaysia is at same level there population was 30 percent” combines clauses without correct agreement, articles, or punctuation. Other recurring problems include “the population … get changed,” “both countries were having,” and “they will increas,” where verb forms and agreement are inaccurate. These errors can make relationships between figures difficult to follow. Practise writing one clear comparison per sentence, using consistent past tense for historical data and “is projected to” or “will” for forecasts, with full stops between complete ideas.

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