Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line graph demostrate the information about the percentage of the population in four Asian ountries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 and with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

Overview, the least populated country was Indonesia and the most populated country was Philippines in 1970. On the other hand, prediction for 2040 according to graph is Thailand will be least country and Malaysia will be the leading country.

The population of all country had rised over the peroide. In 1970 Indonesia was at fourth rank in the graph but according to prediction it will be at secound rang in the graph.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the topic and make an attempt to compare the starting and projected positions, but the response addresses the task only minimally. The overview says Indonesia was the least urbanised and the Philippines the most urbanised in 1970, which is accurate; it also correctly identifies Malaysia as the leader in 2040. However, Thailand is not projected to be the least in 2040: the Philippines is lower, at about 56%, compared with Thailand at about 50%—so Thailand is actually the least, while Indonesia is higher. The claim that all countries rose overall is broadly supported, but no figures or intermediate trends are reported. The response is 92 words, below the required 150; develop the overview and add key comparisons across the period.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic, recognisable order: an introduction, an overview, and a final statement about change over time. This gives the reader some structure, and phrases such as “On the other hand” signal a comparison. However, progression is limited because the final paragraph adds only one broad claim and does not organise the countries’ trends into meaningful comparisons. The opening “Overview,” is also an awkward paragraph transition, and “In 1970” does not clearly connect to the preceding general statement. To improve, group the information—for example, describe Malaysia and Indonesia as strong risers, then contrast them with the Philippines’ fluctuation and Thailand’s slower growth—and use clear references to dates and values.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a small set of relevant terms, including “percentage,” “predictions,” “leading country,” and “rank,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the vocabulary is limited and some choices are inaccurate or unnatural: “least populated country” refers to total population rather than the share living in cities, while “fourth rank” and “secound rang” are not natural descriptions of the graph’s ordering. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “demostrate,” “ountries,” “peroide,” and “secound.” Use precise task vocabulary such as “lowest proportion of urban residents,” “highest,” and “rose to second place.” A wider range of trend verbs and comparison phrases would help you report the data more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You communicate several simple ideas using basic sentence patterns, and the reader can usually follow the intended meaning. However, the range is narrow, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction are frequent. For example, “The population of all country had rised” has problems with the plural noun and verb form; “the prediction … is Thailand will be” needs a clearer clause structure; and “Indonesia was at fourth rank” uses an incomplete grammatical pattern. The introduction also has an awkward construction with “from 1970 to 2020 and with predictions.” Practise accurate simple comparisons first, then combine them with clauses such as “while” and “whereas.” Check subject–verb agreement and past-tense forms before finishing.

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