Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The chart contain data about the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in towns from 1970 to 2020. It has also predictions for 2030 and 2040.

First of all, in this chart we have information about population of cities in four countries Philippines,Malaysia,Thailand and Indonesia. In this chart we have data from 1970 to 2020 and also prediction for 2030 and 2040. Malaysia have higher number of percentage then other country and Thailand have less percentage then 3 countries.

Now we do comparison In detail, in 1970 Malaysia and Philippines have same percentage of 30% and in Thailand 20% and Indonesia 15% in 1980 in Malaysia its going high 40% but in Philippines its same 30% and in Thailand 25% and in Indonesia 20% . But in next years like 1990,2000,2010 and 2020 in Malaysia its going high up to 65% and in Philippines its high but not higher then Malaysia 40% in Indonesia 50% and in in Thailand 35% . we also have predictions in 2030 in Malaysia its going to 80% and in Philippines 50%. In 2040 in first country 90% and other 55%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the subject and time span, and you attempt comparisons between the four countries. However, the response only partially reports the main features, and several figures or trends are inaccurate. For example, Malaysia and the Philippines were not both at 30% in 1970: they were about 30% and 32%, respectively. The Philippines rose to around 48% in 1990, then fell before increasing again, rather than remaining around 40%; Indonesia reached about 52% by 2020, not 50% across the later years. The claim that Thailand had the lowest figure throughout is also not true in 1970, when Indonesia was lower. Include a clear overview of the contrasting growth patterns and report key stages more accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has paragraph breaks and a basic sequence from introduction to comparisons and predictions, so the reader can recognise the intended structure. However, progression is limited: the second paragraph repeats information already given in the introduction, and the final paragraph combines many years and countries in a long, difficult-to-follow sequence. Linking phrases such as “First of all,” “Now we do comparison,” and “But in next years” are repetitive or awkward, while references such as “first country” and “other” are unclear. Organise the body into clearer stages—for example, historical trends and then forecasts—and compare related countries within each stage. This would make the relationships between figures easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant terms, including “percentage,” “predictions,” “comparison,” and “higher,” which help communicate the topic. However, the vocabulary range is limited and several phrases are repeated, especially “in this chart” and “going high.” Some choices are imprecise for this graph: “towns” is used where the task concerns people living in cities, and “number of percentage” is not a natural expression. There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, such as “then” for “than” and “its” for “it is,” which can distract the reader. Use more precise trend language and vary comparisons, while checking common forms and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response mainly uses simple sentence patterns, with attempts to connect ideas using “but” and “and.” However, agreement and verb-form errors occur frequently, as in “The chart contain,” “Malaysia have,” and “its going high.” Several sentences lack clear grammatical structure, particularly the long comparison beginning “But in next years like 1990,2000,2010 and 2020,” where clauses and figures run together. Articles, plurals, and punctuation are also inconsistently controlled, making some relationships difficult to interpret. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and build shorter sentences around one comparison at a time. Then add controlled complex forms, such as “While Malaysia rose…, the Philippines…” to show relationships clearly.

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