Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The image lustrate the information of four asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 and prediction for 2030 to 2040 and making comparison

Overall , the percentage of all four asian countries populatin is increased and phillpines is on the top and will be phillpines is also on high percentage of all still 2040.

firstly the indonatia population is rose in 1970 from 10 percent to 50 prcent in 2020 and it will be 60 percent in 2040

secondly the all population is increased but as compare to phillpines so phillpines is growth highy through out from all of this because they are rose very higl

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the topic and attempt an overview, but the main features are not accurately or sufficiently reported. The claim that the Philippines is “on the top” is incorrect: Malaysia has the highest urban share from 2000 onward and is projected to reach about 84% in 2040. The statement that all four countries increased is broadly true across the period, but it misses the Philippines’ dip after 1990 and gives little comparison among the series. Indonesia’s figures are roughly in the right range, although its 2040 value is closer to 64% than 60%. The response is also 98 words, below the required 150, leaving key trends undeveloped. Select the highest and lowest series, notable changes, and accurate endpoint comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening, an overview beginning “Overall,” and two points introduced by “firstly” and “secondly.” These markers give the reader some sense of sequence. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the final point is incomplete and does not clearly explain a comparison. The overview and body also repeat the general idea that the figures increased without developing separate, connected observations. Improve cohesion by grouping the information into a clear overview and paragraphs comparing the countries’ trends, and use linking phrases to show contrast or change, such as “whereas” and “by contrast.” Complete each sentence and make sure each paragraph has one clear purpose.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of relevant terms, including “percentage,” “population,” “increased,” and “compare,” so the general subject can be recognised. However, vocabulary is repetitive and several spelling and word-form errors make the writing less clear, for example “lustrate,” “asian,” “populatin,” “phillpines,” and “higl.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “population is rose” and “growth highy.” For this chart, use precise language for trends and comparisons rather than repeating “increased”: for example, describe a figure as rising, falling, remaining stable, or being higher than another. Check country names and common chart vocabulary carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt simple statements and some longer structures, including “Overall, the percentage … is increased” and “as compare to phillpines,” but control of sentence forms is limited. Verb forms are often incorrect: “is increased” and “is rose” should use an appropriate past or present form, such as “increased” or “rose.” The opening sentence lacks a clear grammatical structure, and the final sentence is difficult to interpret because its clauses are not properly connected. There are also problems with articles, plurals, and punctuation, including the comma spacing in “Overall ,”. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check tense consistency when describing past data and future predictions.

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