Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The graph provides information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries namely, Philippines, Palaysia, Thailand, Indonesia living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040 .

Overall, Philippines and Malaysia were start together at the same position but finished a with a long difference of percentage. One the other hand Indonesia and Thailand were start like

In 1970 Philippines and Malaysia started with similer percentage which was around 30% while were commence between 10 to 20 percent which was almost similer.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the chart’s subject and names all four countries, and it makes a relevant comparison between the Philippines and Malaysia at the start. However, it is far too incomplete to summarise the main features: the overview stops mid-sentence (“Indonesia and Thailand were start like”), and there is no account of how the figures change over time or what is predicted. The claim that the Philippines and Malaysia “started with similer percentage” is broadly accurate, but the response gives no meaningful later comparisons. It contains 64 words, 86 short of the 150-word minimum; 24 words copied from the prompt were excluded. To improve, complete a clear overview and report the major trends and selected figures for all four countries.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by an overview and then a detail paragraph beginning “In 1970.” The linking phrases “Overall” and “On the other hand” also show an effort to connect ideas. However, the overview is unfinished, and the second paragraph ends without developing its comparison. The large blank spaces further interrupt the presentation, while the relationship between the countries in “while were commence” is unclear. Build a complete paragraph sequence—introduction, overview, and grouped details—and ensure each sentence is finished and clearly linked to the next.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “percentage,” “population,” “predictions,” and “started,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is narrow and several word-choice, spelling, and collocation problems make the writing less clear or natural. Examples include “Palaysia” for “Malaysia,” “similer” for “similar,” “a long difference of percentage,” and “were commence.” The phrase “same position” is also imprecise for describing similar starting percentages. Use accurate trend language such as “rose,” “declined,” “remained stable,” and “was projected to reach,” and check spelling and common collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few sentence forms, including an introductory clause and a contrast using “while,” but control of basic sentence structure is inconsistent. For example, “Philippines and Malaysia were start together” has an incorrect verb form, and “Indonesia and Thailand were start like” is incomplete. In “while were commence between 10 to 20 percent,” the subject is missing and the sentence pattern does not communicate a complete comparison. There are also problems with articles and punctuation, such as the comma after “namely” and the space before the final full stop. Practise complete subject–verb sentences and accurate past-tense forms, then proofread each sentence for completeness.

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