Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The line graph illustarte the populance in four Asian countries from 1970 to 2020 as well as predicts the future till 2040.

Overall, Malayia is predicted from the higest population which will be followed by Indonesia. Whereas Thailand is accounted for the least inhabitants in future.

Malaysia intitiated with

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the chart’s subject and attempts an overview, noting that Malaysia will be highest and Thailand lowest in the future; these are relevant broad features. However, the overview is incomplete and partly inaccurate: Indonesia is not simply “followed by” Malaysia in the future, since it remains below Malaysia but above the Philippines and Thailand, and the response gives no meaningful account of the historical trends or comparisons. The unfinished sentence, “Malaysia intitiated with,” leaves the report without supporting details. The task requires at least 150 words, and this response is substantially below that minimum, so it cannot adequately summarise the graph. To improve, complete the report with key changes and comparisons across the four countries, using selected figures from the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by a separate overview paragraph, and “Overall” signals a summary. This gives the reader a minimal sense of structure. However, the response stops after the fragment “Malaysia intitiated with,” so there is no progression into supporting details or a concluding comparison. The contrast marker “Whereas” is also used as a sentence fragment rather than being connected to the preceding statement. Develop a clear sequence—introduction, overview, then grouped details—and use linking expressions to show comparisons between countries and changes over time. Completing each sentence and paragraph would make the organisation more coherent.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “line graph,” “predicted,” “population,” and “inhabitants,” and the intended topic is generally understandable. However, spelling and word-form errors are conspicuous: “illustarte,” “populance,” “Malayia,” “higest,” and “intitiated.” Some choices are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “predicted from the higest population”; “is projected to have the highest proportion” would express the chart’s measure more accurately. The vocabulary range is too limited to describe trends, rises, falls, and comparisons. Practise accurate chart language such as “urban population,” “percentage,” “rose,” and “remained below,” while checking spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response shows a small amount of sentence variety, including a present-tense introduction and a future-oriented overview. Some basic sentence meaning can be followed, but grammatical control is uneven. “The line graph illustarte the populance” has subject–verb agreement problems, while “Malaysia is predicted from the higest population” does not form a correct grammatical pattern. “Whereas Thailand is accounted for the least inhabitants in future” is also awkwardly constructed, and “Malaysia intitiated with” is an incomplete clause. Use accurate structures such as “The graph illustrates…” and “Malaysia is projected to have the highest proportion…”. A fuller response with complete sentences and varied comparisons would demonstrate a broader, more controlled range.

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