Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-07-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The line graph illustrates the population variation from 1970 to 2020 and population prediction for 2030 and 2040 in four Asian countries.

The four countries experience an upward trend of percentage of the population in the past and future. The percentage of the population living in Malaysia saw the most significant growth. In contrast, Philippines experienced the least rising trend.

In 1970, Malaysia had approximately 30% of total population, which was closed to 31% of Philippines, and it was higher than the other two countries. Then it remains growing and it was predicted ending at 80% in the 2040, making it the largest percentage of population living in cities among four countries. Meanwhile, the total trend of Philippines is also upward, the percentage even exceeded Malaysia's in 1990 at approximately 50%. While before it ended at approximately 53% in the 2040, it has dropped to 42% in the 2010.

In terms of Thailand and Indonesia, the percentage of the population living in cities were approximately 14% and 19% in the 1970, then they both saw growth from 1970 to 2000. In 2000, the percentage of Philippines exceeded Indonesia, and it surged dramatically which is predicted ending at 60% in the 2040. As for the Indonesia, it goes up moderately, with approximately 44% in 2040.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

该回答通过识别主要趋势并提供相关数据点，涵盖了任务的所有要求。你成功地突出了四个国家整体的上升轨迹，并进行了恰当的比较，例如指出了马来西亚的显著增长以及各国家在 1970 年和 2040 年的相对位置。然而，对菲律宾的分析略显混乱；你提到它在 1990 年超过了马来西亚，但随后又描述了 2010 年的下降，这使得叙述逻辑有些矛盾。为了达到更高的分数，请确保所引用的数据点与时间线清晰对应，以免让读者产生困惑。

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

这篇文章逻辑清晰，分为引言、概述和两个主体段落。你使用了 'In contrast', 'Meanwhile', 和 'In terms of' 等衔接词来引导读者。然而，一些过渡显得生硬或略显别扭，例如 'While before it ended at approximately 53% in the 2040, it has dropped to 42% in the 2010'。指代有时不够明确，特别是在讨论菲律宾的波动时。改善句子之间的连贯性将有助于使文章读起来更自然、更通顺。

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

你展示了足以完成任务的词汇量，使用了如 'upward trend', 'significant growth', 和 'surged dramatically' 等词汇。在选词和搭配上存在一些细微的不准确，例如 'remains growing'（应为 'continued to grow'）和 'total trend'（应为 'overall trend'）。虽然这些词汇足以清晰地表达意思，但缺乏更高分数段所要求的复杂性和精确度。专注于与数据描述相关的更精确的搭配将有助于提高你的分数。

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

你使用了简单句和复杂句的混合结构。文中存在一些语法错误，例如 'percentage of the population living in cities were'（主谓一致错误，应为 'was'）、'which was closed to'（应为 'close to'）以及 'as for the Indonesia'（多余的冠词）。此外，在描述过去数据与未来预测时，时态的一致性也存在问题。虽然这些错误不会妨碍交流，但出现频率较高，影响了你获得更高的分数。请重点关注主谓一致和时态使用的一致性。

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