Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-07-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph gives the information about four asian countires includle Philippines,Malaysia,Thialand and Indonesia.The data is about population living in cities from 1970 to 2020.It also include information about the preditions for 2030 to 2040.
As the percentage of the population living in cities of Malaysia are about 40 percent till 1980 but their is a dramatic rise in 2000 the percentage increaces to 60 percent and then in 2020 it about 70 percent which increase to 80 percent in 2040 as the perdiction show.The chart of philippines show many rise and fall as the percentage is 30 percent till 1980 but their is a dramatic rise in 1990 and then a dramatic falls in 2000 which keep decreasing till 2010 .Then their is a slitg increase in 2020 which keep increasing as the predition show.
The graph of Thailand and Indonesia are pretty simillar as their is 30 percent population in cities till 2000 but then there is a dramatic rise in Indonesia which keep increasing as the predition show but there is no more changes in Thialand graph till2020.But the predition show a rise in Indonesia graph.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all four countries and mentions the time frame, but the analysis is inconsistent. While you identify some trends, the description of the data is often inaccurate (e.g., stating Malaysia was 40% until 1980 when the graph shows a steady rise). You fail to provide a clear overview of the main trends, such as the general upward trajectory across all nations. The report lacks a summary of the most significant features, which is essential for a Band 6 or higher. To improve, ensure you accurately read the data points and group the information logically rather than listing each country separately.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often repetitive (e.g., 'then there is', 'as the prediction show'). The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between countries. You need to use a wider range of linking words and transition signals to connect your ideas more fluidly. Improving the structure of your sentences and using better paragraph transitions will help the reader navigate your analysis more effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive, relying heavily on words like 'rise', 'fall', and 'increase'. There are several spelling errors, such as 'asian', 'countires', 'includle', 'Thialand', and 'preditions'. These errors, combined with the limited range of vocabulary, hinder the overall quality of the response. To achieve a higher band, you should incorporate more precise vocabulary related to trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'peaked', or 'projected', and ensure you check your spelling carefully before submitting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'The graph of Thailand and Indonesia are', 'the chart of philippines show') and incorrect verb tenses. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and incorrect capitalization of proper nouns. While you attempt some complex sentences, they are often faulty, which impacts the clarity of your writing. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement will significantly improve your score.
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