Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The line graph represents the ratio of population living in urban areas of four various nations in Asia from 1970 to the future prediction till 2040.

overall, it can be seen that the population in all the countries will rise significantly by the year 2040 in which malaysia will be the most populated in the future.

To begin with, Philippines and malaysia had almost equal ratio of population who ,lived in cities which was 30% and it remained same till 1990. However, the percentage of population in philippines declined from 1990 to 2010,and then fluctuated and will reach 50% by 2040 whereas the population which habitat in city in malaysia increased rapidly by 2030 and it is predicted to reach almost 80% by 2040.

The ratio of population lived in city in Thailand grew gradually and it will rise constantly from 20% to 40% by 2040. on the other side, Indonesian city population shows steady growth till 2000, but it is expected rise suddenly by 2040 and reach from almost 10% to 60%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response covers all key features of the graph, including the trends for all four countries and the future projections. You have successfully identified the main trends, such as Malaysia's significant growth and the fluctuations in the Philippines. However, the overview is slightly weak; while it mentions the general rise, it could be more precise by highlighting the most significant contrast, such as the gap between Malaysia and the other nations by 2040. The data points are generally accurate, though ensure that comparisons are made more explicitly throughout the body paragraphs to better meet the requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices like 'To begin with', 'However', and 'on the other side' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions feel slightly abrupt. The referencing is generally clear, but the internal structure of the sentences could be improved to ensure a smoother progression of information. Paragraphing is used appropriately, which helps the reader follow the development of your analysis.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuated', 'significantly', and 'gradually'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'ratio of population' (percentage of the population is more accurate) and 'population which habitat in city' (which is grammatically incorrect and uses 'habitat' as a verb). To reach a higher band, try to use more precise academic vocabulary and avoid repetitive phrasing. Spelling is generally accurate, but ensure you capitalize proper nouns like 'Malaysia', 'Philippines', 'Thailand', and 'Indonesia' consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'in which malaysia will be the most populated' (should be 'most urbanized'), 'population lived in city' (should be 'urban population'), and issues with article usage and punctuation (e.g., missing spaces after commas). These errors do not impede communication, but they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of relative clauses to improve your accuracy.

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