Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

We have a graph which show the population in four Asian countries. Now we will describe the information of the main feature by selecting and reporting and make comparisons

In 1970 the population percentage of Indonesia and Thailand is between 105 to 20% on the other hand the population percentage of Malaysia and Philippines is 30%. Now we will see the percentage of population in 2020 the percentage of both countries Indonesia and Thailand is 25% on the other hand the other two countries Malaysia and Philippines there population percentage is different Malaysia having 605 of population while Philippines having 45%.

Now we will talk about the predication of population in four Asian countries. The population percentage of Indonesia will be 55% in 2030 and the other countries population percentage will be like Thailand maybe have 30% and Malaysia maybe have 80% and Philippines maybe have 45% in 2030

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the task achievement score. While the response attempts to describe the data, it lacks a clear overview of the main trends. The information provided is fragmented and lacks a cohesive summary of the overall patterns across the four countries. Furthermore, the data interpretation is inaccurate in several places, such as citing '105 to 20%' or '605 of population', which suggests a misunderstanding of the graph's figures. To improve, you must ensure all data points are accurately transcribed and include a clear introductory summary that highlights the most significant trends rather than just listing individual data points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organized into three short paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is weak. The use of cohesive devices is repetitive and mechanical, relying heavily on phrases like 'on the other hand' and 'now we will talk about'. There is a lack of logical flow between sentences, and the transition between the description of 1970 and 2020 is abrupt. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus, such as grouping countries by similar trends rather than listing them chronologically in a disjointed manner.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. There are significant issues with numerical accuracy and word choice, such as '605 of population' instead of '60%'. The phrasing is often informal and lacks the academic tone required for Task 1. To improve, focus on using precise vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a significant increase'. Avoid using conversational fillers like 'Now we will see' or 'Now we will talk about', as these are not appropriate for a formal report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the population percentage... is 30%') and incorrect preposition usage. The sentence structures are mostly simple, with very few attempts at complex sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with a lack of commas to separate clauses, making the text difficult to read. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like verb tense consistency and pluralization.

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