Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-07-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The line graph describes that information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

Overall, Malaysia will have the highest population predicted in the future that the other three Asian countries While, Philippines, Thailand and Indonesia have equal range of population predicted in future.

To begin with, from 1970 to 2040 Malaysia will be predicting the highest population of the individuals among all three countries almost double of the staring population range. It should constantly increasing after 1990 and goes up to 90% form the 30% of the population rate. Philippines was around 30% in 1970 and rose upto approximately 50% in 1990 than steadily decline around 10% in 2010 than it will slightly grown around 50% in 2040.

However, Thailand and Indonesia are at 15-19% in the starting year 1970 and in 2000 both are reach to same point at approximately 25%. Apart from this, from 2010 to 2040 Indonesia are rise quickly and jump upto around 59% while, Thailand are around 49%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main trends and making comparisons. However, the overview is slightly confusing; stating that the Philippines, Thailand, and Indonesia have an 'equal range' is inaccurate based on the data provided. While the main features are highlighted, the analysis of the data is sometimes imprecise, such as the description of the Philippines' trend, which contains factual errors regarding the decline and growth percentages. To reach a higher band, ensure that the data points are read accurately and that the overview clearly summarizes the most significant trends rather than focusing on minor details.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. There is a clear introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or misused, such as 'While, Philippines...' and 'than steadily decline'. The transition between ideas is occasionally abrupt, and the referencing is not always clear. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'in contrast', 'furthermore') would help the flow of the essay and improve the logical progression of ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing the writer to describe trends such as 'constantly increasing', 'rose', and 'decline'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'predicting the highest population of the individuals' and 'starting year'. The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, and there is a reliance on basic descriptors. To improve, the student should focus on using more precise collocations related to data description, such as 'upward trend', 'fluctuated', or 'reached a peak'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Indonesia are rise', 'Thailand are around'), incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'will be predicting'), and punctuation errors. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on consistent verb tense usage and subject-verb agreement would significantly improve the quality of the writing.

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