Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

iam explain the four Asian countries living the cities from 1970 to 2020.

Now i will tell about first one country Indonesia.

How much people live in the cities. Indonasia 60 percent people living in city.And if we predict for 2030 and 2040 then people lives in city like 80 percent.

Now we tells about Thailand city how much percent living in city i will tell now 50 percent people living in city if we predict then its live like 10% live in city.

Malaysia people live in city 80 percent and as we predict, 2030 and 2040 then people move to city 40 percent.

Now i will explain another country phillipines how much people living in the city as we compared other country its 30% people decrease. In the graph people living in city 50 percent. if we predict 2030,2040 then improve people only 10 percent only increase in living the cities.

Overall all Asian countries people live in cities increase 10,20% inrease.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to accurately report the data provided in the graph. The descriptions of trends for Indonesia, Thailand, Malaysia, and the Philippines are factually incorrect based on the visual data. For example, you state Malaysia's urban population will move to 40 percent, whereas the graph shows a clear upward trend. Furthermore, the response lacks a clear overview of the main trends, instead listing individual country data in a disjointed manner. The task requires a summary of main features and comparisons, which are largely absent or inaccurate.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks logical organization and progression. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and repetitive, such as the constant use of 'Now i will tell' or 'if we predict'. Paragraphing is non-existent, and the ideas are presented as a list of sentences rather than a cohesive report. The lack of transition words makes it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the countries or the progression over time.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive. You rely heavily on simple phrases like 'people live in city' and 'how much percent'. There is no attempt to use academic vocabulary suitable for a data analysis task (e.g., 'urbanization', 'proportion', 'fluctuate', 'projected'). The word choice is often imprecise, and the lack of variety significantly limits the ability to describe the trends effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('people lives', 'people move'), missing articles, and incorrect sentence structure. The writing style is informal and conversational ('Now i will tell', 'iam explain'), which is inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 report. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures, and the punctuation is inconsistent throughout the text.

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