Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the proportion of citizens residing in urban area across four distinct . Asian nation between 1970 and 2020 alongside future projections up to 2040 .
Overall ,all four year country express an upward trend in urbanization over the entire seventy year period . Malaysia consistently maintains or is projected to reach the highest urbanization rate while Indonesia displays the most rapid pace of growth.
In 1970 about 30% of Malaysians lived in ci9ties . This figure climbed sharply and expected to peak at nearly 80% by 2040 , the Philippines started with a higher urban population of over 30% in 11970 , fluctuat
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under the 150-word minimum, which severely limits your ability to cover all parts of the task. While you have attempted to identify main trends and provide some data points, the response is incomplete and cuts off mid-sentence. To achieve a higher band, you must complete the analysis of all four countries and ensure the summary is fully developed. Currently, the lack of completion means the task is only partially addressed, as the overview of the data is truncated and lacks the necessary depth to meet the requirements of an Academic Task 1 response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response shows some basic organizational structure, such as an introduction and an overview paragraph. However, because the text is unfinished, the logical progression is interrupted. There is an attempt to use cohesive devices like 'Overall' and 'while', but the abrupt ending prevents a cohesive flow. To improve, ensure that each paragraph is fully developed and that you use a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas more fluidly. The current structure is too fragmented to demonstrate effective paragraphing or consistent logical progression.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'urbanization rate', 'projections', and 'upward trend'. However, there are several spelling errors and typos, such as 'ci9ties', '11970', and 'nation' (should be plural 'nations'). These errors, combined with the limited length of the text, restrict the range of vocabulary displayed. To improve, focus on accuracy in spelling and ensure you are using precise terminology consistently. Expanding your vocabulary to include more varied ways of describing trends and comparisons will also help boost your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in punctuation and grammar. For example, there are unnecessary spaces before punctuation marks, and the sentence 'the Philippines started with a higher urban population of over 30% in 11970 , fluctuat' is incomplete and grammatically broken. While the meaning is generally clear in the parts that are finished, the high frequency of errors and the incomplete nature of the sentences significantly impact the overall quality. Focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy and sentence completion.
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