Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The graph shows that the information about the percentage of the population in four asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 i,e phillippines, malaysia, thailand and indonesia, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The % of population living in cities starts from 1970 where 30% of population among two countries malaysia and phillippines starts about 50% to 60% till the time 2020, while on the other hand thailand and indonesia started 10% to 20% in 1970 then goes upwards the graph to 30% each till the time period of 2000,now the predictions for these four countries according to the graph shows that malaysia has go for the 90% ,indonesia,goes 60% to 70% and other two countries remains between 40% to 50% in 2040.

the graph illustrates that the four countries pupolation has increased in past few years now the predicition for four countries while two of them goes 90% (i,e malaysia,indonesia ) than other two countries .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to summarize the graph but fails to provide a clear overview or accurately report the data. The description of the trends is confusing and contains factual inaccuracies, such as stating that Malaysia and the Philippines started at 30% in 1970, which does not align with the provided data. Furthermore, the summary of the 2040 predictions is imprecise and lacks a logical structure. The response does not clearly distinguish between the four countries or their specific trajectories, making it difficult for the reader to follow the information. To improve, you must focus on identifying the most significant trends and reporting the data points with greater precision.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a clear structure. The introduction is a run-on sentence that repeats the prompt, and the body paragraphs are poorly organized, making it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas; instead, the text relies on repetitive phrasing like 'till the time' and 'the graph shows'. Paragraphing is not used effectively to separate the overview from the detailed data analysis. To improve, use clear topic sentences for each paragraph and employ linking words such as 'whereas', 'subsequently', or 'in contrast' to connect your points logically.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms like 'goes' or 'starts'. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'phillippines', 'pupolation', and 'predicition'. The phrasing is often awkward, such as 'has go for the 90%', which hinders clarity. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends accurately (e.g., using 'upwards the graph' instead of 'showed an upward trend'). To improve, focus on learning specific collocations for describing graphs, such as 'experienced a steady increase', 'reached a peak', or 'remained stable'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'two countries... starts'), incorrect verb tenses, and poor sentence construction. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, lacking proper punctuation. For example, 'the graph shows that the information about...' is an incomplete thought structure. The use of complex sentence structures is attempted but results in errors that obscure the meaning. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and using correct punctuation, particularly commas and periods, to separate distinct ideas.

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