Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

So, the graph is talking about the inflation of population in Asian countries and also there is a predictions for the upcoming year 2030 & 2040.

The population of Asian Countries living in cities is likely way to high in Malaysia it's going from 30% and growing every year drastically and in predictions are also way strong like almost 85%, the city Philippines also had an good growth from 30% to 50% at the period till 1990, then after it fall down, Thailand's growth is an avg like from 20% to 40 % including the prediction till 2040, the Indonesia is having the lesser to the greater growth its from 15% to 60% also including the predictions.

However, all the countries have an almost nearby growth by comparing just Malaysia & Indonesia is having a little more growth compare to another ones.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you identify some trends, the analysis is superficial and lacks a clear overview of the main features. You mention specific countries but fail to provide a cohesive summary of the overall trends (e.g., the general upward trajectory across all nations). The data interpretation is also slightly inaccurate; for instance, describing the Philippines' trend as falling after 1990 is not supported by the typical data for this task. To improve, ensure you include a clear introduction, a distinct overview paragraph, and detailed comparisons of the data points, ensuring you meet the length requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response lacks a clear paragraph structure, appearing as a single block of text. The use of cohesive devices is limited and often mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'and' to join clauses. There is no clear logical progression between sentences, making the flow disjointed. To improve, you should organize your essay into at least three paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs that group information logically. Use a wider variety of linking words like 'furthermore', 'in contrast', or 'consequently' to connect your ideas more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'way to high', 'way strong', and 'good growth' are informal and lack the precision required for an Academic Task 1 report. You also use incorrect terminology, such as 'inflation of population' instead of 'urbanization' or 'percentage of the population'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate flexibility or precision. To improve, focus on using topic-specific vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuate', 'steady increase', and 'projected to reach'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with sentence structure, such as run-on sentences and comma splices (e.g., '...drastically and in predictions are also way strong...'). Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent, and the use of prepositions is often incorrect. The range of structures is limited, relying mostly on simple sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and punctuation. Practice using complex sentences with relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions to demonstrate a wider grammatical range.

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