Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The below line graph represents the precentage of residents living in cities in four different Asian countries including Philipines ,Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia from 1970 to 2020,with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
Overall,the citizen of Philipines are 30% in 1970 and gradually increased in 1980 and reaching by 50% in 1990.From 2020,the residents will increase and the population of it will become almost 53% in 2040.Talking about Malaysia,the rise population is seen from 30% in 1970 and in upcoming years,it will reach to almost 80% in 2040.looking at Thailand's public, the population is increased from 15% in 1970 to 25% in 1990. After 1990,it stayed constant.In future,the population will rise and reach by 48% in 2040 according to prediction.Indonesia's residents will increase in upcoming years and total approximated population of it will be 60% in 2040.
To conclude, all four nation's population will increase in 2040 according to the predictions.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the task by identifying the main trends for the four countries. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical, listing data points rather than synthesizing the information. While the overview is present, it lacks a clear comparison of the relative positions of the countries (e.g., Malaysia's rapid growth compared to Thailand's stagnation). Some data points are imprecise, such as describing the Philippines' trend as 'gradually increased' when the graph shows a more complex trajectory. To improve, focus on grouping countries by similar trends and highlighting the most significant differences rather than describing each country in isolation.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into an introduction, body, and conclusion, which provides a basic structure. However, the flow between sentences is often disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'the population' or 'in upcoming years'. Paragraphing is also insufficient; the body of the report is presented as a single block of text, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of ideas. Using more varied linking words and separating the body into logical paragraphs would significantly improve the coherence of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. There is a heavy reliance on basic terms like 'increase', 'rise', and 'population'. Some phrasing is unnatural, such as 'looking at Thailand's public' or 'the rise population is seen'. There are also minor spelling errors, such as 'precentage' and 'Philipines'. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to data trends, such as 'fluctuate', 'plateau', 'surpass', or 'projected to reach'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation. Issues include missing articles (e.g., 'in 1990'), incorrect preposition usage (e.g., 'reaching by 50%'), and subject-verb agreement errors (e.g., 'the citizen of Philipines are'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to distract the reader. Focusing on consistent subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles would help improve the overall accuracy of your writing.
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