Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the changes in the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities over a sixty-year period spanning from 1970 to 2040.
Overall, it is clear that Malaysia stood out as the dominant category, consistently reporting by far the highest figures, whereas Philippines witnessed a substantial increase throughtout the timescale. Of particular note is that Indonesia experienced upward trajectories.
In terms of detailed statistics, Malaysia experienced a stable increase, commencing at approximately 30% in 1970 and surged to reach its peak of 80% in 2040. After which, the figure plunged to 40%, followed by another jump to just under 45%. A year later, it saw a considerable rise to approximately 60%, before back to almost 80%
By contrast, Indonesia followed a completely inverted trajectory. The data witnessed a marked lift from 14% in 1970, before stabilising at merely 60%. Meanwhile, the figure for Thailand remained relatively stable at below 40% throughtout the decade.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
Javob grafikda taqdim etilgan ma'lumotlarni aniq bayon eta olmagan. Malayziya tendensiyasi haqidagi tavsif fakt jihatidan noto'g'ri bo'lib, manba materialida mavjud bo'lmagan 'plunge' va 'jump' kabi so'zlar ishlatilgan. Bundan tashqari, javobda umumiy sharhda tilga olingan bo'lsa-da, Filippin haqidagi batafsil tahlil butunlay tushirib qoldirilgan. Indoneziya haqidagi xulosa ham taqdim etilgan raqamlarga nisbatan noaniq va noto'g'ri. Yaxshilash uchun tavsifingiz grafikdagi vizual ma'lumotlarga qat'iy amal qilishini ta'minlashingiz va grafikda mavjud bo'lmagan tendensiyalarni o'ylab topmasligingiz kerak. Shuningdek, barcha to'rtta mamlakat asosiy qismlarda qamrab olinganiga ishonch hosil qilishingiz lozim.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
Insho paragraflarga bo'lingan va 'In terms of detailed statistics' hamda 'By contrast' kabi bog'lovchi vositalardan foydalanishga urinish bor. Biroq, mantiqiy ketma-ketlik ma'lumotlarni bayon etishdagi faktik xatolar tufayli jiddiy ravishda buzilgan. Havolalar ba'zan chalkash va umumiy sharh bilan asosiy qismlar o'rtasidagi o'tish ma'lumotlarning aniq va ravshan xulosasiga olib kelmaydi. Yaxshilash uchun ma'lumotlarni mantiqiy guruhlashga – ehtimol mamlakatlarni yoki vaqt davrlarini solishtirish orqali – e'tibor qarating va bog'lovchi vositalaringiz siz tasvirlayotgan ma'lumotlar nuqtalari o'rtasidagi munosabatni aniq aks ettirishiga ishonch hosil qiling.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Siz 'dominant', 'upward trajectories', 'inverted trajectory' va 'stabilising' kabi yetarli darajadagi lug'at boyligini namoyish etasiz. Biroq, 'throughtout' kabi imlo xatolari va ba'zi noo'rin so'z birikmalari mavjud. Lug'at boyligi odatda ma'noni yetkazish uchun yetarli, ammo ma'lumotlar tendensiyalarini tasvirlashda atamalarning noto'g'ri ishlatilishi (masalan, grafikda barqaror o'sish ko'rsatilgan bo'lsa-da, 'plunged' so'zini ishlatish) yozuvning aniqligini cheklaydi. Yuqoriroq balga erishish uchun grafikda ko'rsatilgan aniq harakatlarni tasvirlovchi lug'atdan, masalan, 'fluctuated', 'remained constant' yoki 'peaked' kabi so'zlardan foydalanishga e'tibor qarating.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
Javob oddiy va murakkab gap tuzilmalarining aralashmasini o'z ichiga oladi. 'before back to almost 80%' (fe'l tushib qolgan) va 'whereas Philippines witnessed' (artikl tushib qolgan) kabi bir nechta grammatik xatolar mavjud. Garchi bu xatolar o'quvchining mo'ljallangan ma'noni tushunishiga butunlay to'sqinlik qilmasa-da, ular matnning umumiy ravonligiga ta'sir qiladigan darajada tez-tez uchraydi. Yaxshilash uchun ega-kesim moslashuvi, artikllardan to'g'ri foydalanish va grammatik yaxlitlikni saqlash uchun har bir gapda aniq asosiy fe'l borligiga e'tibor qarating.
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