Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The provided line graph delineates data regarding the changes in the percentage of the population in four Asias countries living in cities over a sixty-year period spanning from 1970 to 2040.
Overall, it is immediately salient that Malaysia experienced a remarkable upward trend, whereas the converse was true for the Indonesia, which witnessed a steady incrase throughout the timescale. Additionally, the most dramatic growth was registered in Philippines.
In terms of detailed statistics, Thailand commenced at approximately 19% in 1970 and subsequently surged dramatically to reach a peak of 30% in 2020. Following this exponential growth, the figures plateaued consistently at this high level for the remainder of the period.
By striking contrast, Indonesia followed a completely inverted trajectory. The data plummeted sharply from jumped sharply from 13% in 1970, before hitting a rock-bottom of merely highest of merely 60%. Thereafter, this category experienced wild fluctuations until the final year.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
Javob grafikda keltirilgan ma'lumotlarni aniq yetkazib bera olmagan. Garchi siz mamlakatlarni aniqlagan bo'lsangiz ham, tendensiyalar tavsifi taqdim etilgan vizual ma'lumotlarga ko'ra faktik jihatdan noto'g'ri. Masalan, siz Indoneziyani 'plummeting' trayektoriyasiga ega deb ta'riflaysiz va 60% lik 'rock-bottom' darajasiga yetganini aytasiz, bu esa bunday ma'lumotlardagi urbanizatsiyaning odatiy o'sish tendensiyasiga zid keladi. Bundan tashqari, javob to'liq emas, chunki u topshiriqda ko'rsatilgan to'rtta mamlakatdan faqat ikkitasini qamrab olgan. Yuqoriroq band olish uchun taqdim etilgan ma'lumotlar grafik bilan aniq mos kelishiga va topshiriqning barcha asosiy jihatlari yoritilganiga ishonch hosil qilishingiz kerak.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
Insho paragraflarga bo'lingan, bu ijobiy qadam. Biroq, mantiqiy rivojlanish faktik noaniqliklar va hisobotning to'liq emasligi tufayli to'sqinlikka uchragan. 'In terms of detailed statistics' va 'By striking contrast' kabi bog'lovchi vositalardan foydalanilgan, ammo ular samarali qo'llanilmagan, chunki ular bog'laydigan ma'lumotlar bir-biriga zid yoki tushunarsiz. Havola qilish (referencing) ham muammoli, chunki umumiy sharh va asosiy paragraflar o'rtasidagi o'tish tendensiyalarning aniq xulosasiga olib kelmaydi. Ma'lumotlarni taqdim etish aniqligini oshirish yozganlaringizning izchilligini yaxshilashga tabiiy ravishda yordam beradi.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Siz 'delineates', 'salient', 'exponential' va 'fluctuations' kabi so'zlar bilan boy lug'atdan foydalanishga yaxshi urinish qildingiz. Biroq, so'z tanlash va kollokatsiyalar bilan bog'liq jiddiy muammolar mavjud. Masalan, 'Asias countries' grammatik jihatdan noto'g'ri va 'jumped sharply from' iborasi chalkashlik keltirib chiqaradigan tarzda takrorlangan. Bundan tashqari, 60% lik yuqori ko'rsatkichni tasvirlash uchun 'rock-bottom' kabi atamalarning noto'g'ri ishlatilishi aniqlik yetishmasligidan dalolat beradi. Yaxshilash uchun ma'lumotlar tendensiyalarini aniq aks ettiruvchi lug'atdan foydalanishga e'tibor qarating va so'z tanlovingiz akademik hisobot uchun kontekstga mos kelishiga ishonch hosil qiling.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
Javobda muloqotga vaqti-vaqti bilan to'sqinlik qiladigan bir nechta grammatik xatolar mavjud. Artikllardan foydalanish ('the Indonesia', 'the Philippines'), ko'plik shakli ('Asias countries') va gap tuzilishi bilan bog'liq muammolar bor. 'The data plummeted sharply from jumped sharply from 13%' iborasida bir xil gapda ikkita zid fe'l qolib ketgan aniq tahrirlash xatosi mavjud. Garchi siz ba'zi murakkab gap tuzilmalaridan foydalanishga uringan bo'lsangiz ham, xatolar chastotasi yuqori. Yuqoriroq bandga erishish uchun takroriy xatolarni bartaraf etish va gap tuzilishingiz grammatik jihatdan to'g'ri va aniq bo'lishini ta'minlash uchun ishingizni qayta o'qib chiqishga e'tibor qaratishingiz kerak.
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