Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The provided line graph delineates data regarding the changes in the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities over a sixty-year period spanning from 1970 to 2040.
Overall, it is immediately salient that Malaysia experienced a remarkable upward trend, whereas the converse was true for Indonesia, which witnessed a steady increased throughout the timescale. Additionally, the most dramatic growth was registered in Philippines.
In terms of detailed statistics, Thailand commenced at approximately 19% in 1970 and subsequently surged dramatically to reach a peak of 30% in 2020. Following this exponential growth, the figures plateaued consistently at this high level for the remainder of the period.
By striking contrast, Indonesia followed a completely inverted trajectory. The data plummeted sharply from jumped sharply from 13% in 1970, before hitting a rock-bottom of merely highest of merely 60%. Thereafter, this category experienced wild fluctuations until the final year.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
Javobingiz 150 so'zlik eng kam so'z talabiga javob bermaydi, bu esa ballingizga salbiy ta'sir qiladi. Bundan tashqari, ma'lumotlar tahlili faktik jihatdan muammoli. Siz Indoneziyadagi vaziyatni 'plummet' va 'wild fluctuations' bilan 'rock-bottom of 60%' darajasiga tushgan deb ta'riflaysiz, bu esa urbanizatsiya bo'yicha odatiy grafik tendensiyalariga zid keladi va taqdim etilgan ma'lumotlarni noto'g'ri tushunganingizdan dalolat beradi. Asosiy xususiyatlarni aniqlashga harakat qilgan bo'lsangiz-da, raqamlarni noto'g'ri talqin qilish va matnning to'liq emasligi yuqoriroq ball olishingizga to'sqinlik qiladi. Yaxshilash uchun yozishdan oldin o'qlar va ma'lumotlar nuqtalarini diqqat bilan o'qib chiqing va minimal chegaradan xavfsiz o'tish uchun har doim kamida 160 so'z yozishga intiling.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
Insho mantiqiy paragraflarga bo'lingan va 'In terms of detailed statistics' hamda 'By striking contrast' kabi bog'lovchi vositalardan foydalanishga urinish mavjud. Biroq, mantiqiy oqim ma'lumotlarning noto'g'ri talqin qilinishi tufayli izdan chiqqan. Umumiy sharh va asosiy paragraflar o'rtasidagi o'tish aniq, ammo ikkinchi asosiy paragrafning ichki izchilligi tendensiyalarning chalkash va qarama-qarshi ta'rifi tufayli zaif. Bog'lovchi so'zlarning kengroq doirasidan foydalanish va g'oyalar rivojlanishining vizual dalillarga mos kelishini ta'minlash yozma ishingizning ravshanligi va mantiqiy tuzilishini yaxshilaydi.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Siz 'delineates', 'salient', 'exponential' va 'trajectory' kabi atamalarni qo'llab, yaxshi lug'at boyligini namoyish etasiz. Bular yanada murakkab tildan foydalanishga urinishni ko'rsatadi. Biroq, kollokatsiya va so'z tanlashda muammolar bor, masalan, 'steady increased' (to'g'risi 'steady increase' bo'lishi kerak) va 'jumped sharply from jumped sharply from' (takrorlash xatosi). 'rock-bottom of merely 60%' iborasi ham semantik jihatdan chalkash. Yuqoriroq bandga erishish uchun ushbu ilg'or so'zlardan aniqroq foydalanishga e'tibor qarating va lug'at tanlovingiz chalkashlik yaratish o'rniga grafikda taqdim etilgan haqiqiy ma'lumotlarni aks ettirishiga ishonch hosil qiling.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
Inshoda sodda va murakkab gap tuzilmalari aralashmasidan foydalanilgan. 'steady increased' o'rniga 'steady increase' va takrorlanuvchi 'jumped sharply from jumped sharply from' kabi bir nechta grammatik xatolar mavjud. Bundan tashqari, 'the figures plateaued consistently at this high level for the remainder of the period' gapi yaxshi tuzilgan bo'lib, murakkab tuzilmalardan foydalanish qobiliyatini ko'rsatadi. Biroq, xatolarning tez-tez uchrashi, jumladan zamonlardagi nomuvofiqliklar va takrorlashlar, ishingizni yanada diqqat bilan tahrir qilishingiz kerakligini ko'rsatadi. Ega-kesim moslashuviga e'tibor qaratish va ortiqcha iboralarni yo'q qilish aniqlik va umumiy nazoratni yaxshilashga yordam beradi.
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