Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the changes in the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities over a sixty-year period spanning from 1970 to 2040.
Overall, it is clear that Malaysia stood out as the dominant category, consistently reporting by far the highest figures, whereas the Philippines witnessed a substantial increase throughout the timescale. Of particular note is that Indonesia experienced upward trajectories.
In terms of detailed statistics, Malaysia experienced a stable increase, commencing at approximately 30% in 1970 and surged to reach its peak of 80% in 2020. After which, the figure plunged to 40%, followed by another jump to just under 45%. A year later, it saw a considerable rise to approximately 60%, before back to almost 80%
By contrast, Indonesia followed a completely inverted trajectory. The data witnessed a marked lift from 14% in 1970, before stabilising at merely 60%. Meanwhile, the figure for Thailand remained relatively stable at below 40% throughout the decade.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
Javob grafikda keltirilgan ma'lumotlarni aniq aks ettirmaydi. Asosiy tendentsiyalarni aniqlagan bo'lsangiz-da, Malayziya uchun keltirilgan aniq ma'lumot nuqtalarini (masalan, 'plunged to 40%' va 'jump to just under 45%') taqdim etilgan grafik asosida faktik jihatdan noto'g'ri. Bundan tashqari, vaqt jadvalining tasviri chalkash, chunki siz 'a year later' va 'throughout the decade' iboralarini ishlatgansiz, bu esa ko'rsatilgan 10 yillik intervallarga mos kelmaydi. Yaxshilash uchun ma'lumotlarni ajratib olishingiz aniq bo'lishiga va tarixiy ma'lumotlar (1970–2020) hamda prognozlar (2030–2040) o'rtasidagi farqni aniq ko'rsatishingizga ishonch hosil qiling. Umumiy xulosa mavjud, ammo umumiy o'sish tendentsiyalari haqida yetarli darajada batafsil ma'lumot yo'q.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
Insho mantiqiy paragraflarga bo'lingan va 'By contrast' hamda 'In terms of' kabi bog'lovchi vositalardan foydalanishga urinish bor. Biroq, g'oyalarning rivojlanishiga ma'lumotlarning noto'g'ri keltirilishi to'sqinlik qiladi, bu esa bayonni tushunishni qiyinlashtiradi. Havola qilish (referencing) ba'zan noaniq, ayniqsa Malayziya ko'rsatkichlaridagi o'zgarishlarni tasvirlashda. Paragraflarga ajratish hisobot uchun mos bo'lsa-da, ma'lumotlar tasviridagi mantiqiy izchillikning yo'qligi ichki bog'liqlikni susaytiradi.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Siz 'upward trajectories', 'inverted trajectory' va 'commencing' kabi atamalarni ishlatib, yaxshi so'z boyligini namoyish etasiz. Biroq, 'dominant category' (grafikda mamlakatlar ko'rsatilgan, toifalar emas) va 'throughout the decade' (grafik 70 yilni qamrab oladi) kabi noaniq so'z tanlash holatlari mavjud. Murakkabroq so'z boyligidan foydalanishga uringan bo'lsangiz-da, ma'lumotlarni taqdim etishdagi noaniqliklar til har doim ham ko'zda tutilgan ma'noni samarali yetkazib bera olmasligini anglatadi. Vizual ma'lumotlarda ko'rsatilgan tendentsiyalarni aniq aks ettiruvchi so'zlardan foydalanishga e'tibor qarating.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
Javobda sodda va murakkab gap tuzilmalari aralashmasidan foydalanilgan. 'before back to almost 80%' (fe'l tushib qolgan) va 'The data witnessed a marked lift... before stabilising at merely 60%' (grafikda ma'lumotlar 60% da barqarorlashmaydi) kabi ba'zi grammatik xatolar mavjud. Tinish belgilari odatda maqbul, ammo oxirgi paragrafdagi gap tuzilishi biroz noqulay. Yuqoriroq band balliga erishish uchun murakkab gaplaringiz grammatik jihatdan to'liq ekanligiga va tarixiy ma'lumotlar hamda kelajak prognozlarini tasvirlashda fe'l zamonlaridan izchil foydalanilganiga ishonch hosil qiling.
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