Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The graph shows that the content rise in the population. As we can see that graph have four countries and the data is between 1970 to 2040 and we can see the constent rise in it.

At the starting year in 1970 there is only less population approx 10 % and at 2040 all most 80 to 90 % . In Thailand the population is under control but the less population is also not good. On Another hand we can see that Malaysia has the higest number of population around 80 to 90% in 2040 also the second place in 1970 at 30%.

However thee Indonesia is the lowest a the start in 1970 at 12% but in 2040 it take a lead at reached at 60 % on second place.

The data also shows that the prediction done of 2030 to 2040 and the 1970 to 2020 are given in the cities

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to provide a clear overview or accurately report the main features. While it mentions the four countries and the time frame, the description of the trends is confusing and lacks precision. For example, stating 'population is under control' is irrelevant to the graph, which tracks urbanization percentages. The data points are often inaccurate or poorly described, such as the claim that Indonesia 'takes a lead' at 60% when the graph shows other countries reaching higher levels. The response lacks a clear summary of the overall trends, which is essential for Task 1.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks logical organization. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the progression of ideas is disjointed. Cohesive devices are used in a very mechanical and often incorrect way, such as 'On Another hand' and 'However thee Indonesia'. The referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between countries. The final sentence is particularly confusing and does not serve as a logical conclusion to the report. Overall, the flow of information is hindered by poor sentence structure and a lack of clear transitions.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'content rise' instead of 'consistent rise', 'all most' instead of 'almost', and 'higest' instead of 'highest'. The student struggles to use appropriate terminology for describing trends or data, relying on basic phrasing that does not accurately convey the information presented in the graph. The lack of precision in describing the data points significantly impacts the clarity of the report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. Sentence structures are simple and often incomplete or poorly formed, such as 'As we can see that graph have four countries'. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and tense consistency. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing or misplaced commas and periods. The range of structures is very limited, and the errors are pervasive throughout the text, making it difficult to identify any complex sentence attempts that are accurate.

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