Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The graph illustrates information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predichon for 2030 and 2040.
From an overall perspective the graph show that the percentage of the population living in urban areas. The graph counties are thialand, malyca malaysaphilipines, and Indonasia shown in the graph. The graph shows predict that Indonasia and Malaysia will grow sharply. And phillippins and Thailand are flucfueled.
First of all, In 1970 philipines citizen are only 10% in urban area. But it goes up
slightly to 2040. The graph pridicts that phillippines will grow more than 45% living in urban area as compaed through 2040 as compaed to 1970. On other hand Indonesia wil grow very much multine tiny than 1970. The graph prid predict Indonesia goes 30% of urban population to di more than 80% of urban populcon.
On the other hand,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the main features. While it identifies the countries and the general trend of growth, the description of the data is highly inaccurate and confusing. For instance, the claim that the Philippines' urban population grows 'slightly' to 2040 is not supported by the data, and the description of Indonesia's growth as 'multine tiny' is unintelligible. The response lacks a clear overview and fails to make meaningful comparisons between the four countries. The information provided is fragmented and does not accurately reflect the trends shown in the graph, leading to a failure to fully address the requirements of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is poorly organized, making it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. Paragraphing is used, but the content within the paragraphs lacks logical flow. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive and awkward use of 'The graph' to start almost every sentence. There is no clear transition between the introduction, the overview, and the body paragraphs. The referencing is often unclear, particularly when discussing the countries, which are misspelled and inconsistently introduced. The overall structure is disjointed, which significantly hinders the reader's ability to understand the information presented.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The range of vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate. There are numerous spelling errors, such as 'predichon', 'thialand', 'malyca', 'malaysaphilipines', 'Indonasia', 'phillippins', 'flucfueled', and 'populcon'. These errors, combined with non-standard word choices like 'multine tiny', make the text difficult to read. The student struggles to use appropriate terminology for describing trends, such as 'grow sharply' or 'flucfueled' (likely intended to be 'fluctuated'). The vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information clearly, and the frequent errors impede communication throughout the response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement, such as 'the graph show' and 'philipines citizen are'. Sentence structure is often fragmented or grammatically incorrect, such as 'The graph counties are thialand, malyca malaysaphilipines, and Indonasia shown in the graph.' Punctuation is also problematic, with erratic capitalization and misuse of full stops. The lack of control over basic grammatical structures means that the meaning is often distorted or lost, preventing the student from demonstrating any complex sentence forms.
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