Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The maps demonstrate current outline of Norbiton industrial area and the future plan of the site.
Overall, though there are some factories in the center right now with a farmland, several new roads, housings as well as shops, medical centre, school, playground will be developed later. The industrial area will be transformed to an residential area. Town and river will be remained the same.
Today, in the centre part, eight factories are situated. Factories are placed on the side of a road. The road is also connected with another southern road in the map. Currently there is no connection between the farmland and the factories .
In future, instead of factories, several housings, shops and a school will be developed to convert it to a residential area. In the eastern side, there will be a school at the end of the road. Before that, some housings will be on both side of the road. A playground will be constructed between the river and housings. On west, some new housings will be made with shops in the centre. There will also be a medical centre in the south part of the outline. There will also be a bridge connecting the center of the map to the farmland. Furthurmore, in Farmland, another housing will be developed too.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 2.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 2.0
The response is completely off-topic. The prompt asks for a summary of a graph showing population percentages in four Asian countries from 1970 to 2020. However, the student has written a description of a map showing the industrial area of Norbiton. Because the student failed to address the actual task question and data provided, the response cannot be assessed for task achievement regarding the graph. It describes a completely different task (a map task). Consequently, this criterion is severely impacted as the requirements of the prompt were not met.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, and there is a logical flow within the description of the map. The student uses basic cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'Today', 'In future', and 'Furthermore' to sequence the information. While the content is irrelevant to the prompt, the internal structure of the text itself is coherent and easy to follow. The paragraphing is appropriate for a descriptive task, and referencing (e.g., 'the road', 'the factories') is generally clear, which allows for a higher score in this specific criterion despite the off-topic content.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for describing a map, using terms like 'industrial area', 'transformed', 'residential', 'constructed', and 'situated'. There is some repetition of basic words like 'housing' and 'road', and the range is somewhat limited. However, the student demonstrates the ability to use topic-specific vocabulary related to urban planning. There are no significant spelling errors that impede communication. The lexical range is sufficient to convey the intended meaning of the map description, even though the topic is incorrect.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are some grammatical errors, such as 'Town and river will be remained the same' (passive voice error) and 'on both side of the road' (pluralization error). Additionally, 'Furthurmore' is misspelled. Despite these errors, the meaning is generally clear, and the grammar does not significantly impede the reader's understanding. The control of verb tenses is generally consistent with the future-oriented nature of the map plan. The range of structures is sufficient for a band 6 level.
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