Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrate us information about the percentage of the population in four Asian Countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions from 2030 and 2040 and Also compress and make comparisons the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
Taking a closer look of graph which is illustrates us two sides which is divided in two lines one is percentage of total population and second is years. Additionally in 1970 Malaysia population's graph starts normally but in 1990 to 2040 graph shows us population goes higher than all other countries. In 1970 Indonesia's population are very low among all countries but the population gradually increased in 2000 and continously rise up in future to 2040. Phillipines's population goes down then Malaysia in 1970 and continously Population declined in future from 1990 to 2040. Thailand's Population graphs take better start in 1970 then Indonesia but in 1990 population of Thailand gradually declined than all other countries in future from 1990 to onwards 2040.
Conclusion, the population of Malaysia gradually increased in future and on the otherhand, Thailand's population becomes low and controlled in the future.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the graph but fails to provide a clear overview of the main trends. The description of the data is often inaccurate; for instance, the claim that the Philippines' population 'declined' from 1990 to 2040 contradicts the typical upward trend seen in such demographic data. Furthermore, the response includes unnecessary meta-commentary about the task instructions ('compress and make comparisons the information') rather than focusing solely on the data. Key features are not highlighted effectively, and the analysis is superficial, lacking the necessary precision to reach a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or incorrect, such as the awkward transition 'Taking a closer look of graph which is illustrates us'. The referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between countries. The conclusion is abrupt and does not effectively synthesize the information presented in the body paragraphs. Overall, the flow of ideas is disjointed, which hinders the clarity of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'population' and 'graph'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'graph starts normally' and 'population of Thailand gradually declined than all other countries'. The student struggles to use precise terminology to describe trends (e.g., 'rise up' instead of 'increase' or 'climb'). The range is insufficient to convey the information with the necessary precision required for an Academic Task 1 response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede meaning. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('Indonesia's population are very low'), incorrect verb tenses, and awkward sentence structures ('Phillipines's population goes down then Malaysia'). The use of complex sentences is attempted but often results in errors, such as the run-on sentence in the introduction. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and capitalization. The range of structures is limited, and the high frequency of errors prevents the response from reaching a higher band.
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