Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

first of all this graph describe information of percentage of population in famous four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 predictions of 2030 and 2040. Overall,IN 1970 Malaysia has only about 30% of population but the prediction of graph show that the Malaysia has become most populated country in the graph .

The diagram represent the information about population and shows predication of 2030 and 2040.This graph illustrates that Indonesia and Thailand start with near the 20% of population and reach above and near the 50%. Malaysia and Philippines start with almost 30% and Philippines reached above the 50% and Malaysia reached the highest level of population in 2040. All of these describe the population level of the countries which are shown in the graph. The prediction of this graph tell that in future the prediction will become true .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you identify some trends, the analysis is superficial and lacks a clear overview of the main features. You mention specific percentages, but the description of the trends is repetitive and lacks the necessary detail to fully address the task. For example, you state that Malaysia becomes the 'most populated country,' but the graph actually shows the percentage of the urban population, not the total population. The lack of a clear, analytical summary of the data trends means the response does not fully cover the requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into two paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The introduction is poorly structured, and the second paragraph jumps between countries without a clear organizational strategy. Cohesive devices are largely absent or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'The prediction of this graph' and 'All of these describe.' The referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the four countries. To improve, you should use linking words like 'whereas,' 'in contrast,' or 'subsequently' to connect your ideas more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'information,' 'graph,' and 'population.' There is a lack of variety in reporting verbs and descriptive language. For instance, you use 'describe' and 'represent' repeatedly rather than more precise academic vocabulary such as 'illustrate,' 'depict,' 'fluctuate,' or 'climb.' Additionally, there are errors in word choice, such as using 'famous four Asian countries' which is not appropriate for an academic report. Expanding your range of vocabulary related to data trends is essential for a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'this graph describe' instead of 'describes,' and 'prediction of graph show' instead of 'shows.' Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and incorrect capitalization. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and using a wider variety of sentence structures, such as relative clauses or passive voice, to describe the data more accurately.

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