Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates information regarding the proportion of the people who live in urban areas of four Asian nations from 1970 to 2020, also the predictions for 2030 and 2020.
Overall, In Malaysia the population has increased dramatically. The number of the people in the cities displayed an upward trend except phillippines which fluctuated throughout the period. Units are given in percentage.
In the year 1970 approximately a third number of people live in the Malaysia which rose slightly in 1990 to just over a third. From 2000 onwards it increased dramatically and reached to over seven out of ten in year 2020 and expected to rise by 80% in year 20240.However ,the population of Indonesia was just 14% in the begining of the period but climbed significantly after that and reached the highest to 50% in 2020and will remain similar till the end of the period.
In 1970 the Thailand and phillipines population was 30
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to address the task adequately. While it identifies some trends, the description is incomplete and stops abruptly mid-sentence. The overview is present but lacks clarity, and the data reporting is inconsistent and contains significant inaccuracies (e.g., misinterpreting the graph's timeline and data points). The report does not cover all four countries effectively, and the abrupt ending prevents a full summary of the information. The inclusion of '20240' as a year is a clear error in data interpretation. To improve, ensure all data points are accurately transcribed and that the response is fully completed before the time limit.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response shows some attempt at logical organization, with an introduction and body paragraphs. However, the progression is severely hampered by the incomplete nature of the final paragraph. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Overall' and 'However', but they are sometimes used mechanically or incorrectly. Paragraphing is present but the final paragraph is left unfinished, which disrupts the overall flow and structure of the report. To improve, ensure that each paragraph is fully developed and that ideas are linked smoothly throughout the entire text.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'phillippines' (capitalization and spelling) and 'begining'. The phrasing is often awkward, such as 'a third number of people' and 'reached the highest to 50%'. The vocabulary used is sufficient to convey basic meaning but lacks the precision and variety required for higher bands. To improve, focus on using more accurate terminology for describing trends, such as 'proportion', 'percentage', and 'urban population', and pay closer attention to spelling and capitalization.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with article usage ('the Malaysia', 'the Thailand'), subject-verb agreement, and tense consistency. Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex structures often result in errors, such as 'the population of Indonesia was just 14% in the begining of the period but climbed significantly after that and reached the highest to 50% in 2020and will remain similar'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for small errors would be highly beneficial.
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