Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph shows the percentage of four different Asian countries population living in cities these countries is Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia these four countries the population living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
The line graph illustrates that the average of people was lived in cities from 1970 to 2020 in Philippines the percentage of population in 1970 the population is 30% after twenty years the percentage reached 90% and after that the population slightly decreased in the year of 2010 after it slightly increased and reached about 50% in the year of 2040. The people of Malaysia that how lived in the cities 1970 the people that how lived in cities is about 30% every years the population highly increased from other three countries after that reached in 2040 is about 80%. The people of other two countries Thailand and Indonesia are also increased in every year in addition to, people of Indonesia highly increased people that lived in the cities
in the conclusion that which the population of four different countries that lived in the cities every year the population highly increased in the cities.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the graph but fails to provide a clear overview of the main trends. While it mentions the four countries, the data reporting is inaccurate and confusing. For instance, the claim that the Philippines reached 90% urbanization is not supported by standard interpretations of such graphs. Furthermore, the response lacks a clear comparison between the countries, focusing instead on disjointed descriptions. Key features, such as the starting points in 1970 and the projected end points in 2040, are not clearly contrasted. The conclusion is also very brief and does not synthesize the information effectively, leading to an underdeveloped response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks logical organization. The paragraphs are poorly structured, and the flow of ideas is frequently interrupted by grammatical errors and run-on sentences. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas; for example, the transition between the description of the Philippines and Malaysia is abrupt. The use of referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of the data. The conclusion is disconnected from the body paragraphs, and the overall structure does not facilitate a clear summary of the information provided in the graph.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic phrases like 'the population is' and 'highly increased'. There is a lack of precision in describing trends; for example, 'the average of people was lived in cities' is an awkward and inaccurate construction. The student struggles to use appropriate terminology for describing data, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable'. While the meaning is generally discernible, the lack of variety and the frequent misuse of words prevent the response from achieving a higher band score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede readability. There are significant issues with sentence structure, such as run-on sentences and missing verbs (e.g., 'the people that how lived in the cities 1970'). Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent, and there is a lack of complex sentence structures. Punctuation is also problematic, with a lack of full stops to separate distinct ideas. These errors are pervasive and occur throughout the text, indicating a lack of control over basic grammatical forms.
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