Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line graph depicts the information about the number of populations in different Asian nations living in urben centre between 1970 and 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
Firstly. the percentage of people living in cities was around 30 in Philippines and Malaysia in the initial year. The count of individuals increased drastically in Malaysia after 1990 and reached at nearly 76 percent in 2020 and in 2040, the number of people living in urban areas will be at peak. Fluctuations were noticed in the count of Philippines people living in cities between 1980 and 2020 and in 2040, the number of people will be around 55 percent.
In Indonesia, the proportion of individuals was below 30 from 1970 to 2000 and in 2040, the number of residents in cities will be noticed at approximately 60 percent. The percentage of local people in cities was around 20 in Thailand in1990 and the count of residents remained stable from 1990 to 2020 which was nearly 30 percent.
Overall. the highest count of population will be Malaysia cities and least will be noticed in Thailand urban areas in 2040.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all four countries and the time frame provided. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you identify the main trends, the description of the data is occasionally inaccurate or lacks precision. For example, stating that the count of individuals in Malaysia increased 'drastically' is a good use of descriptive language, but the claim that Thailand's population remained 'stable' from 1990 to 2020 is not fully supported by the graph, which shows a slight upward trend. Furthermore, the overview is quite brief and could be more effectively integrated to highlight the most significant trends rather than just stating the end points for 2040.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, body paragraphs for the countries, and a concluding overview. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally awkward. For instance, the use of 'Firstly.' as a sentence fragment is incorrect. Transitions between sentences are sometimes abrupt, and the referencing (e.g., 'the number of people') is repetitive. While the progression of ideas is generally clear, the lack of sophisticated linking words makes the flow feel somewhat disjointed. Improving the variety of cohesive devices would help the essay move more smoothly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for a higher band. You rely heavily on basic terms like 'number of people' and 'count of individuals' throughout the text. There are also some errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'urben centre' (spelling error: urban centers) and 'reached at nearly 76 percent' (the preposition 'at' is unnecessary). To improve, try to incorporate more varied terminology related to trends, such as 'proportion,' 'percentage,' 'climb,' 'plateau,' or 'projected,' and ensure accurate spelling and preposition usage.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include 'The line graph depicts the information about the number of populations' (should be 'the percentage of the population'), 'in Philippines' (missing the article 'the'), and 'in 2040, the number of people will be around 55 percent' (tense usage is acceptable, but the phrasing is repetitive). Punctuation errors, such as the period after 'Firstly' and 'Overall', also affect the accuracy. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles would significantly improve your score.
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