Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The population in different cites increase very much. only in Philippines THE population is not increase so much since the long period of time.
in this paragraph we can discuss about the population increase in different cities. in 1970 the population in Indonesia is about 13 percent and in 1980 the population is also same but in 1980 the population of Indonesia is rise to 22 percent and in 2020 it increase 60 percent and it is predicted that in future the population of Indonesia is reach to 60 percent.in Thailand the population in 1970 is 18 percent but in the 2020 it rocket to 25 percent. and it is predicted that in the year of 2030 it reaches to 40 percent. and in 2040 it reaches to 45. and in Malaysia it rise up directly forms 30 percent to 80 percent. and in Philippines the population in 1970 is 30 percent and it continue up and down for the year of 2020. and expert say that in 2040 it reaches to 55 percent.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear overview or identify the main trends. The data reporting is inconsistent and contains significant inaccuracies, such as stating Indonesia's population was 13% in 1970 and 22% in 1980, which does not align with the provided graph. The description of the Philippines is vague, using 'up and down' rather than describing the actual trend. The response lacks a clear summary of the key features, such as the overall growth across all countries, and fails to make meaningful comparisons between the nations. The information is presented in a fragmented manner, making it difficult to follow the data trends accurately.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. The introduction is poorly formed, and the body paragraphs are not clearly separated; the second paragraph is a long, run-on block of text that mixes data from different countries without clear transitions. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas, and the referencing is often confusing. The progression of information is disjointed, and the lack of paragraphing makes the text difficult to navigate. The response does not follow the standard format for an IELTS Academic Task 1 report, which requires a clear introduction, overview, and detailed body paragraphs.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic verbs like 'increase', 'rise', and 'reaches' throughout the text. There are errors in word choice, such as 'rocket to 25 percent' (which is not an accurate description of the trend) and 'rise up directly forms'. The lack of variety in reporting verbs and the inability to use precise terminology for describing trends (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'projected') significantly limits the quality of the response. The vocabulary used is insufficient to convey the data with the necessary precision for an academic task.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'population... is not increase'), incorrect tense usage (e.g., 'population... is rise'), and missing articles. Sentence structures are simple and repetitive, with very few attempts at complex sentences. Punctuation is also problematic, with many sentences starting with lowercase letters and run-on sentences that lack proper conjunctions or punctuation. The high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the text from reaching a higher band score.
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