Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The given diagram defines the total number of people who lives in forth countries of Asia during the period of 1970 to 2020 to the upcoming years of 2-030 to 2040.
First of all, the population of Philippines was gradually increase in 2020 to 2030 , It remained same in 1990 to 2000 . But , in the period of 1970 to 1990 the average ratio of Philippines people were low as compared to others year . The Total number of people from Malaysia were gradually increase and decrease in all years like , from 2010 to 20230 it will rise ,but in 1970 to 1990 ,the strength of people were low . The total number of people from Thailand and Indonesia were usually same , from 1970 to 2000 it was low but it dramatically increase from 2010 to 2040 .
overall ,the inhabitants of Malaysia are increased to the three others countries of Asia .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to summarize the graph but fails to provide a clear overview or accurately report the data. The description of trends is often inaccurate; for example, stating that the Philippines' population 'remained same in 1990 to 2000' contradicts typical graph data, and the mention of '20230' is a clear error. The response lacks a logical selection of key features, focusing on minor details while missing the broader trends of urbanization across the four countries. The overview provided is vague and does not effectively synthesize the information presented in the graph.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a clear structure. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the progression of ideas is disjointed. Cohesive devices are used in a very mechanical and often incorrect way, such as the repetitive use of 'from... to...' structures without clear logical links between sentences. The referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the four countries. The overall arrangement of information is confusing, and the lack of logical flow significantly hinders the clarity of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'increase', 'decrease', and 'people'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'average ratio of Philippines people were low' and 'strength of people'. The misuse of numbers (e.g., '2-030') and the lack of precise terminology for describing trends (e.g., 'dramatically increase') limit the ability to convey information effectively. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'population... were', 'people... was'), incorrect tense usage, and awkward sentence construction. Punctuation is also problematic, with unnecessary spaces before commas and periods. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. The lack of control over basic grammatical rules makes the text difficult to read and understand, preventing it from reaching a higher band score.
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