Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph presents the data about the account of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with prediction for two decades. All units are in percentage.
Overall, there are four Asian countries and they are Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand, Indonesia. All of them are rising with different trends. Malaysia is marginally rising, Philippines is fluctuatation, Thailand is dramatically rising similarly to Indonesia.
Fristly, Malaysia was increased from 30 to 45 from 1970 to 1990 , After it sharply roses till 2020 however, Malaysia's population will be increased around 85 percentange in 2040 according to the prediction. On the other hand, Indonesia was roses from 19 to 28, then from 1990 it slightly increased till 2020 by 31. However predection says that it will rose to 45 in 2040.
The notable thing was Philippines, it was fluctuted from 32 in 1970, in 1980 it slightly increased to 34, after it sharply rose to 50 in one deacde, however it declined increased from 1990 to 2010 by 50 to 43. After it slightly increased. Thailand was dramitically increasing, roses from 1970 to 1990 by 19 to 29. After it marginally inceased between 1990 to 2020, future predication says it will sharply roses form 30 to 45 percentages of population.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers all four countries and the time period, including the predictions. However, the overview is weak; it lists the countries rather than identifying the main trends, such as the overall upward trajectory for all nations. The reporting of data is sometimes inaccurate or confusing (e.g., stating Malaysia was 30 to 45 from 1970 to 1990, when the graph shows a different progression). The description of the Philippines' trend is particularly difficult to follow due to imprecise data reporting. To improve, focus on grouping the countries by similar trends and ensuring the data points cited are accurate.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical flow is frequently interrupted by awkward transitions and repetitive sentence structures. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often misused (e.g., 'Fristly', 'After it sharply roses', 'On the other hand'). The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of the data. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus would significantly enhance the coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and word formation, such as 'account of the population' instead of 'percentage of the population', and 'fluctutation' instead of 'fluctuation'. The student struggles with verb forms, frequently using 'roses' or 'rose' incorrectly as a verb (e.g., 'it will rose to 45'). While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of precision and the repeated errors in basic terminology prevent the response from reaching a higher band. More variety in reporting verbs and nouns is needed.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Tense usage is inconsistent, particularly when discussing past data versus future predictions (e.g., 'it will rose to 45'). There are also persistent errors in subject-verb agreement and word order. While the errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to cause difficulty for the reader. To improve, focus on mastering the correct use of past and future tenses and ensuring consistent subject-verb agreement.
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