Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrate the proportion of population living in four different Asian countries from 1970 to 2010, with yhe predictions for 2030 and 2040.
Overall, the line graph show that Malaysia maintained their position highest in every year while Indonesia was the least population living country in starting as compared to other.
In 1970, Indonesia was least living country which had about 15% of population but it will roses up to about 53% of population in 2030 according to prediction and takes second highest population country place. Malaysia maintained their place highest from 1970 to 2020 and according to predictions it will be has highest population in year 2040 which will about 83%.
Philippines was highest population living country in 1970
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement. Furthermore, the response is incomplete, ending abruptly mid-sentence ('Philippines was highest population living country in 1970'). While you identified some main features, such as the trends for Malaysia and Indonesia, the lack of completion means that the data for the Philippines and Thailand is not fully reported or compared. To improve, ensure you cover all categories presented in the graph and provide a full summary of the trends, including the start, end, and any significant fluctuations, while ensuring you meet the minimum length requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is poorly structured due to its incomplete nature. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the abrupt ending prevents a logical flow or a coherent conclusion. Cohesive devices are used in a very basic and repetitive manner, such as 'In 1970' and 'according to predictions'. The lack of a clear structure and the unfinished state of the writing make it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words to connect your sentences and ensure that each paragraph has a clear purpose, leading to a logical summary of the data.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely on basic phrasing such as 'highest population' and 'least population living country'. There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'least population living country' instead of 'lowest percentage of urban population'. The vocabulary used is sufficient for basic communication but lacks the precision and range required for an Academic Task 1 response. To improve, try to use more specific terminology related to data description, such as 'urbanization rate', 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'projected to reach'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('The line graph illustrate', 'graph show'), incorrect verb tenses ('it will roses up'), and missing articles or prepositions ('takes second highest population country place'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, and the attempt at a complex structure in the final sentence is incomplete. To improve, focus on basic subject-verb agreement and ensure that your verb tenses are consistent when describing past data versus future predictions. Proofreading for basic errors like 'yhe' (the) is also essential.
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