Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrate the proprportion of the urban population in four countries Philippines,Malaysia,Thailand and Indonesia along with the projection from 2030 to 2040.
Overall,The total population countinous inscrease in urbanization over the period Malaysia and Indonesia has demostrated the most substantial growth rate.
In 1997, Malaysia started with approximately 30% residing in urban areas by 2040 it is increased to over 80%, firmly establishing itself as the country with the most highest urbsn dewelling percentage among the four
he Philippines, commencing at a comparable level to Malaysia in 1970, endured a more erratic journey. Despite the fluctuations, it is forecast to attain around 55% urban population by 2040.
Indonesia, starting from a meager base of below 15% in 1970, has undergone a remarkable surge. It is projected to draw close to 65% by 2040, signifying a substantial transformation in its urbanization landscape
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you have identified the main trends and provided some data points, the overview is slightly underdeveloped. You mention that Malaysia and Indonesia show the most growth, but you miss the opportunity to compare the overall trajectory of all four countries more effectively. Additionally, there are some inaccuracies in data reporting, such as citing 1997 as a starting point when the graph clearly begins in 1970. To improve, ensure you cover all parts of the prompt, provide accurate data, and meet the length requirement to fully develop your analysis.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and limited. For example, the transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt. There are also issues with punctuation, such as the missing space after the comma in 'Overall,The' and the incomplete sentence structure starting with 'he Philippines'. Improving the use of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'in contrast', 'consequently') would help create a smoother flow between your ideas and improve the overall logical progression of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'urbanization', 'projection', 'erratic', and 'substantial'. However, there are several spelling errors, such as 'proprportion', 'countinous', 'inscrease', 'demostrated', and 'urbsn dewelling'. These errors are noticeable and detract from the professional tone required for an Academic Task 1 report. To reach a higher band, focus on accuracy in spelling and ensure that your word choices are precise. You also used 'most highest', which is a grammatical redundancy that also affects your lexical precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('The total population countinous inscrease'), missing articles, and punctuation errors. The sentence 'he Philippines, commencing at a comparable level...' is missing its first letter, and 'most highest' is a double superlative error. While you attempt to use complex structures, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar limits your score. Focusing on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and article usage will significantly improve your accuracy.
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