Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given line chart depicts the information about the percentage if populationin four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. The dat has been calibrated in percentage .

Overall it is crystal clear that highest value recorded will be malaysia for population living in cities . Howeverleast value will carried by Thailand of the population living in cities .

At a glannce Philippines sarts from 31% in begining year then in next year it was almost remain similar as 32% . While in year 1990 population was shrply increase as 46% . After two decades the figure decrease steadily remain only 40% in 2010 . After that it will increase sharply reach its peak point as 50% .Whereas in Malaysia begin with 30% in year 1970 . which moderately increase reach at 42% in year 1990 .After that the figure increase sharply reach at highest point at 82% in 2040 .

Moving ahead , Thailand populatin rate start from 195 which increase considerabily reach at 26% . In next year it shows stable trend in pupulation rate as ranging from 26% to 28% in year 2020 . In year 2030 it will increase sharply reach at largest point at 40% in year 2040. In Indonesia figure start from 11% in first year it will moderately ncrease reach at 25% in year 2000 . Then the rate of population increase sharply reach at 60% in last year

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

You have identified the main trends and provided data points for the four countries. However, the response lacks a clear overview of the overall trends, and the information is sometimes inaccurate or confusingly presented. For example, you state that Malaysia will reach 82% in 2040, which is a key feature, but your description of the other countries is often disjointed. The task requires a more structured approach to comparing the countries rather than listing data for each one individually. Furthermore, some of your data points are unclear or incorrectly transcribed from the graph, which hinders the accuracy of your summary.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moving ahead' and 'At a glance', but they are often used incorrectly or do not effectively link the ideas. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between countries. The paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs is repetitive, relying on a list-like format rather than a cohesive analysis of the data. More variety in linking words and better paragraph transitions are needed to improve the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic verbs like 'increase' and 'reach' without much variation. There are also numerous spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'sarts', 'begining', 'shrply', 'ncrease', and 'populatin'. These errors, combined with the misuse of words like 'calibrated', suggest a limited range of vocabulary. To achieve a higher band score, you should focus on using more precise reporting verbs and nouns to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'a significant rise', and ensure that your spelling is accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'least value will carried by'), missing articles, and incorrect tense usage (e.g., 'it will increase sharply reach'). Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at complex sentences are often faulty or punctuated incorrectly. For instance, the sentence 'In Indonesia figure start from 11% in first year it will moderately ncrease reach at 25% in year 2000' is a run-on sentence with multiple grammatical flaws. You need to focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading for tense consistency.

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