Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrated provide the informtion about the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with the predicitions for 2030 and 2040.

Here the graph represents the population of Philippines at a moderate pace. In the 1970 to 2024 percentage of the population rose from 30% to 50%. On other hand the population of Malaysia is soar from 30% to more than 80 % in between the years 1970 to 2040.

However the population percentage of Thailand less ideal than Indonesia and other three countries. In the year 1970 population is less than 20%, year ahead population percentage rise more than 40 % in 2040. Other side the population of Indonesia in 1970 to 2040, the percentage is 10% to 55% . Malaysia and Indonesia are going to be most rose up population in the years 1970 to 2040. Philippines and Thailand are on moderate pace .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main features of the graph, identifying trends for the four countries. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and contains inaccuracies regarding the data. For example, stating the Philippines rose from 30% to 50% between 1970 and 2024 is incorrect as the graph covers up to 2040, and the data points are not clearly interpreted. The comparison between countries is present but lacks precision. To improve, ensure that data points are accurately read from the axes and that the overview clearly highlights the most significant trends, such as Malaysia's rapid growth compared to the more gradual increases in other nations.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'On other hand' and 'Other side'. The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly in the third paragraph where the transition between Thailand and Indonesia feels abrupt. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult to follow the comparison between the four countries. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus would significantly enhance the flow of the writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'rose' and 'population'. There are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'most rose up population' and 'less ideal'. Some spelling errors, such as 'informtion' and 'predicitions', also detract from the overall quality. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a sharp increase', and ensure that words are used in their correct grammatical context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'The line graph illustrated provide', and missing articles or prepositions throughout the text. The sentence structures are predominantly simple, with limited attempts at complex sentences. When complex structures are attempted, they often contain errors, such as 'In the 1970 to 2024 percentage of the population rose'. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like verb tense consistency and article usage will help improve your score.

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