Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The line graph shows the percentage of the population of of four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020. The predictions for 2030 to 2040 are given below in the graph. It is oir responsibility to summarize the whole information of the chart in the perfect and as well as in simple way that everybody can understand it easilly.

The population of almost the four countries is continously increasing from 1070 to 2040. The highest population of which country is called Malaysia as ín970 it was 30 percent and in in 2040 it is almost 85 percent whereas Philippines and Thaand has slightly changes in their population the ups and downs some time their population increases and sometimes their population is decreasing.

Philippines and Indonesia population is continously increasing. So, according to the graph it has been concluded that the population of these gour Asian countries is continously increasing which has a big effect on the world's population

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task by mentioning the line graph and discussing some general trends among the four countries, such as Malaysia's rise and references to Philippines and Indonesia. However, the student includes unnecessary meta-language ('It is oir responsibility to summarize...') and makes several inaccurate observations that contradict the visual data, such as stating that Philippines and Thailand 'has slightly changes... sometimes their population increases and sometimes their population is decreasing' when the graph shows a general upward trend. Furthermore, key features like comparisons between countries and specific data points are underdeveloped, resulting in a partial coverage of the prompt. Consequently, this performance aligns with Band 4.0 descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text is divided into three short paragraphs, but the organization and progression are weak. The opening paragraph includes unnecessary introductory remarks rather than jumping into the overview. Cohesive devices are minimal or mechanically applied ('So, according to the graph it has been concluded...'). Paragraphing is poorly handled, with the second paragraph mixing multiple countries and confusing trends without clear logical transitions. Reference pronouns are also frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow the relationships between ideas. These features reflect the characteristics of Band 4.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and restricted to simple terms ('population', 'increasing', 'country', 'big effect'). There are numerous spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text, such as 'oir' instead of 'our', 'easilly', 'continously', 'Thaand', and 'gour' instead of 'four'. The lexical range is inadequate for an academic task, often relying on inappropriate conversational phrasing. These frequent errors and the narrow vocabulary cause strain for the reader, placing the response at Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak, with a very limited range of sentence structures. The response contains frequent basic errors in subject-verb agreement ('The population of almost the four countries is', 'Philippines and Thaand has slightly changes'), incorrect prepositions ('in 1070' instead of 'from 1970'), and run-on sentences. Complex structures are either absent or attempt-based with severe errors. These frequent grammatical and punctuation errors often obscure the intended meaning, which corresponds to Band 4.0.

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