Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given line graph illustrates the percentage of population people who living in four cities such as phillippines , malaysia, thailand and indonesia from 1970 to 2040
Overall, it can be seen that is maximum perportion of citizens was seen in malaysia whereas, the minimum ratio of people noticed in indonesia over the given period
The percentage of residents showed 30% in 1970 followed by 40% in 1980 and 60% in 2000 in malaysia , it dramatically increased till 2040 in the future which was highest populace 90% .30% and 50% population of individual in 1970 and 1990 who living in phillippines and then it was fell in 2010 after that populace again rised it was about 55% in last year
Perportion of citizens were seen 20% and 10 % in 1970 and it was constant till 1990 in thailand and indonesia .In contrast, ratio of Indonesia continuesly increased which was 40% and 60% in 2010 and 2030, respectively. But population of thailand declined slightly in same years .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task by reporting the main features of the line graph regarding urban population percentages in four countries. An overview is provided, noting the highest and lowest countries, and some data points are cited for Malaysia, the Philippines, Thailand, and Indonesia. However, there are significant omissions and inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, the data descriptions are often confusing, mixing up countries, years, and figures (e.g., "30% and 50% population of individual in 1970 and 1990 who living in phillippines"). Furthermore, predictions for 2030 and 2040 are only partially covered. While the student attempts to highlight key trends, the lack of precision and clarity places this performance at Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is divided into four paragraphs, which shows an attempt at structure, including an introduction and an overview. However, there is a lack of clear overall progression and logical sequencing between and within sentences. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, with clumsy transitions such as "In contrast, ratio of Indonesia continuesly increased... But population of thailand declined slightly in same years". Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow which data points correspond to which specific years and countries. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion is weak. This corresponds to Band 5.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, relying heavily on terms like "percentage", "population", "citizens", and "people". There are numerous word choice and spelling errors, such as "perportion", "phillippines", "rised", and "continuesly". The student attempts some less common vocabulary, but these attempts are inaccurate and impede communication at times (e.g., "maximum perportion of citizens", "highest populace 90% "). The range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for the task, reflecting a Band 5.0 level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as missing auxiliary verbs, incorrect verb tenses, and awkward phrasing (e.g., "who living in four cities", "ratio of people noticed", "residents showed 30%"). Punctuation and capitalization are also erratic throughout the text. While basic meaning can sometimes be extracted, the high frequency of errors causes significant difficulty for the reader and prevents the response from reaching Band 6.0. It aligns closely with Band 5.0.
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