Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The percentage of population living in cities increase day by day because of facilities of a standerd life.
The population of indonesia was only about to 12 percent in 1970 and then it emerge from 12 to 50 percent and perdiction for 2040 it will become 60 percent of country.
The population of thailand cities was about to 20 percent it increase to 30 percent in 1990 and constant till 2020. The prediction is that it increase to 40 percent population of country which is lower then indoniesia
The population of philippines cities was about 30 percent it was constant till 1980 but start increasing till 1990 but then it deline till 2010 all then start increasing and prediction is that it goes near above 50 till 2040
The population of malaysia cities was about 30 persent it increase till 1990 at normal rate but fromm1990 it increase at very high rate and perdiction is taht it goes above 80 percent which is very high as campare to other.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the main trends from the graph for all four countries, mentioning starting points, changes, and predictions. However, the data points provided contain several inaccuracies when compared to the source graph. For example, the student states that Indonesia's population in 1970 was 'about to 12 percent' (actual is 14%) and that it reaches '60 percent' in 2040 (actual is 64%). Additionally, the overview provided in the opening sentence ('increase day by day because of facilities of a standerd life') offers outside reasoning rather than summarizing the visual data itself. Furthermore, paragraphing is underdeveloped, and the details are lumped together rather than clearly contrasted or grouped. This puts the performance at Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text lacks proper paragraphing, with the body sentences crammed into an unstructured block of text following a single introductory sentence. Logical progression is weak because comparisons between countries are abrupt, and cohesive devices are either missing or misused (e.g., 'all then start increasing' and 'perdiction is taht'). While there is a basic chronological attempt to follow the data across the years for each country, the lack of clear discourse markers, punctuation, and stanza breaks makes the text difficult to follow. This aligns with the Band 4.0 descriptors for cohesion and paragraphing.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, heavily relying on phrases like 'The population of... cities was about'. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'standerd', 'indonesia', 'perdiction', 'deline', 'persent', 'fromm1990', 'taht', and 'campare'. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the basic topic of urban percentages, the range is extremely limited, and lexical errors are frequent, restricting the score to Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical structures are predominantly simple, and attempts at complex sentences are heavily flawed and unpunctuated, resulting in frequent run-on sentences. For instance, 'The population of thailand cities was about to 20 percent it increase to 30 percent in 1990 and constant till 2020.' Tense usage is inconsistent, struggling to shift between past data ('was', 'increase') and future predictions ('prediction is that it goes'). Punctuation is largely absent between independent clauses. These persistent grammatical errors impede readability and place the writing at Band 4.0.
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