Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The line graph compares the proportion of the population in four various countries living in cities between 1970 to 2020. its depics the predictions for 2030 to 2040.
Overall,provided four catagories shows significant rise thoughout the period, in the malaysia population were hieghtes while Indonesia and thailand expriance of fluthuation.
To begin with ,in 1970 only 30% population were living in cities, after tha it was slighly climb, Similarly, it was gruw up till 2040 and reach at thr peak point. The proportin of philippines was 43% initially, after it depic some flu
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is severely under-length, containing only 93 words compared to the required minimum of 150 words. This significantly impacts task completion as the student fails to adequately report the main features or make comprehensive comparisons across all four countries. Although there is an attempt to introduce an overview and mention some trends, the information is extremely partial and abruptly cuts off mid-sentence ('after it depic some flu'). In accordance with the IELTS assessment criteria, under-length responses cannot achieve a passing band score above 4.0 for Task Achievement, as key parts of the visual data are omitted and undeveloped.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text demonstrates a basic attempt at organisation, using cohesive markers like 'Overall' and 'To begin with'. However, the logical progression is disrupted by sentence fragments, abrupt shifts in topics, and incomplete thoughts. Paragraphing is poorly handled, with the response breaking off prematurely in the second paragraph. Referencing is also confusing; for example, the phrase 'provided four catagories shows significant rise thoughout the period, in the malaysia population were hieghtes' lacks clear grammatical links and cohesive flow. Because the text is unfinished and disjointed, it falls squarely within the Band 4 descriptor for structural coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with several noticeable spelling and word-form errors that detract from the writing. Examples include 'catagories', 'thoughout', 'hieghtes', 'expriance', 'fluthuation', 'slighly', and 'gruw'. While the student attempts some topic-related vocabulary like 'proportion' and 'predictions', the lexical range is severely restricted and heavily dependent on simple terms. Word choices are frequently inaccurate, such as 'hieghtes' for highest and 'fluthuation' for fluctuations. These lexical limitations and errors place the response at Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that contain frequent foundational errors. Examples of structural and grammatical faults include 'its depics the predictions', 'the malaysia population were hieghtes', and 'after tha it was slighly climb'. Punctuation and capitalisation rules are frequently ignored, such as starting sentences with lowercase letters ('its depics') and misplacing commas. Because errors are frequent, distort meaning in places, and the response ends abruptly, it aligns with the descriptors for Band 4.
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