Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The line chart illustrated about the population percentage in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 as well predictions for future 2030 and 2040.
Overall, Philippines had largest amount of citizan in 1970 comapre to other three country. Malaysia and Philippines almost have same 30% population in early 70's. Alothous, one yars 2010 two countery have same peseon which is Indonesia and Philippines about 45%. Where in 1970, Indonesia have lower population which is 13%. Other side when we compare in 2040 the highest demoracy in popuation well be Malaysia and oposite well be Thailand reseptively 85% and 48%.
Moreover, in between 1970 to 2040 only Philippines decresed them population. Other three are gradgealy incresing them inhibitants .
In the last, all of the four Asian countries gradually rose them residents in 2040. Which is very imortant for growth of the ecomany and development of countries future.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by attempting to summarize the main trends of urban population percentages across the four Asian countries from 1970 to 2040. However, the data reporting contains significant factual inaccuracies and misinterpretations. For example, the student claims that 'only Philippines decresed them population' between 1970 and 2040, whereas the graph shows an increase for the Philippines from 32% to 55.5%. Furthermore, several specific data points are misread or confused, and the final paragraph includes personal commentary and speculation rather than summarizing graph data. Because the information presented is frequently inaccurate and lacks a fully developed overview of the main features, this performance aligns with Band 5.0 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into short paragraphs, but the logical progression and overall coherence are heavily disrupted by frequent organizational flaws. Transitions between ideas feel abrupt, and cohesive devices are often inaccurate or misused, such as 'Alothous, one yars 2010 two countery have same peseon' and 'Other side when we compare'. Reference pronouns are also frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to track which countries and data points are being discussed. Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas lacks clear structure, placing the response firmly at Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 based on the presence of basic paragraphing breaks.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with numerous spelling errors throughout the text (e.g., 'citizan' instead of citizens, 'comapre' for compare, 'decresed' for decreased, 'incresing' for increasing, 'inhibitants' for inhabitants, and 'ecomany' for economy). Attempts to use less common or academic vocabulary result in severe word-choice and collocation errors, such as 'highest demoracy in popuation'. The limited range and constant mechanical spelling and lexical errors restrict the score to Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The student demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at more complex or comparative forms are heavily flawed by persistent errors in verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and word formation (e.g., 'The line chart illustrated about...', 'Malaysia and Philippines almost have same 30%', 'two countery have same peseon', and 'well be Malaysia and oposite well be Thailand'). Errors occur in almost every sentence, often straining the reader's comprehension. Consequently, the grammar corresponds to Band 4.0.
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