Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The following graphs illustrate the percentage of the population livin in 4 asian cities like philippines, malaysia,thailand and indonesia living from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
overall ,from the given graphs we can observe that malaysia is in the most highest percentage of population with 80 % from year 1970 to 2020,with predictions for 2030.
To begin with the given graphs we can assure that no cities population ries downward massively .every cities was described by diffrent symbol.philippines is only one country which percentage of the population increase in high range at once 1990 and after that the percentage population goes downward compare to other asian cities. we can say that indonesia is in the 2nd greatest at the percentage of the population .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, as it contains only 128 words. Furthermore, the content fails to accurately report the main trends or data from the graph. The student claims that Malaysia remained at 80% from 1970 to 2020, which directly contradicts the visual data showing an increase from 30% to 76%. The overview is vague and inaccurate, and comparisons between the four countries are poorly developed or incorrect. While the prompt is attempted, the information is severely under-developed and contains factual inaccuracies regarding the provided chart.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The essay lacks clear logical organization and progression. Although the writer attempts to use paragraph breaks, the structure is disjointed. The opening paragraph mixes introduction and overview elements poorly, and subsequent paragraphs do not follow a clear analytical structure. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as the awkward transitions "To begin with" and repetitive phrasing throughout the short text. Referencing is also weak, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended comparisons between the four countries.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The lexical resource is limited and inadequate for an Academic Task 1 response. The vocabulary is extremely repetitive, using basic phrases like "percentage of the population" and "cities" over and over. There are notable word choice errors, such as referring to countries as "cities" (e.g., "four asian cities like philippines, malaysia,thailand and indonesia") and incorrect collocations like "most highest percentage". Spelling and punctuation errors are also present, such as missing capitalizations and spacing issues (e.g., "livin", "thailand"), which hinder the overall effectiveness of the response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on simple sentence structures and faulty attempts at complex clauses. There are frequent grammatical errors that impede communication, such as missing prepositions, incorrect verb forms ("no cities population ries downward"), and fragments. Punctuation and capitalization are poorly controlled throughout the text. Because the majority of sentences contain noticeable errors and lack structural variety, the writing falls firmly into the lower bands for grammatical accuracy.
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