Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given line graph depicts the percentage of population living in cities in four asian countries from year 1970 to 2040.
To begin with, Phillippines had the highest proportion of people living in cities in year 1970, with 31% of total.Then, it was closely followed by Malasia at 30% of total, in the same year. Meanwhile, the percentage of people living in Thailand and Indonesia were under 20% of total.
Furthermore, it can be seen clearly that the percentile of humans living in Phillippines will increase constantly throughput the period and will reach at almost 80%, by the year 2040 . Similarly, the figure of people living in cities of Thailand will also increase and by year 2040, it will rise to about 50%.
Besides it, cities population in Indonesia will increase constantly, it surpassed Thailand in year 2000 and Malasia in 2010 and it is expected that this proportion will increase to somewhat 60% in 2040. However, Thailand had a different story, its proportion jumped at 50% in 1990 but then slipped down at 40% in 2010. Malasia will notice an incline in percentange of cities poplution in future and will reach at about 52% inyear 2040.
Overall, it can be noticed that the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities will constantly in the future.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to cover the main trends in the line graph, but it suffers from severe data inaccuracy and complete confusion regarding the countries. For instance, the student states that the Philippines reaches almost 80% by 2040 and that Malaysia drops significantly, which completely contradicts the visual data where Malaysia is actually the one reaching over 80% and the Philippines only reaches about 55.5%. Furthermore, the description of Thailand and Indonesia contains major factual errors about the numbers and intersections shown in the graph. This fails to accurately report the main features and comparisons, placing the response below the requirements for higher bands.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is organized into paragraphs with basic introductory and concluding remarks, and attempts to use transitional markers such as 'To begin with', 'Furthermore', and 'Besides it'. However, the logical progression is undermined by the confused data and inaccurate country references. Paragraphing is present, but the internal cohesion often feels mechanical or forced. Referencing is frequently unclear because the pronouns and names are mixed up between the different country data lines, causing confusion for the reader.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary for discussing charts, using terms such as 'percentage', 'proportion', 'increase constantly', and 'rise'. However, there are numerous lexical and spelling errors throughout the text, including 'Phillippines', 'Malasia', 'percentile' (used incorrectly instead of 'percentage'), and 'throughput' instead of 'throughout'. Less common vocabulary is attempted but frequently misused, leading to awkward collocations and imprecise communication of statistical trends.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'The given line graph depicts...' and 'Furthermore, it can be seen clearly that...'. However, grammatical accuracy is weak, featuring recurring errors in prepositions and tense consistency, such as 'in year 1970' instead of 'in 1970' and 'will reach at almost'. There are also awkward passive and active voice constructions like 'cities population in Indonesia will increase constantly'. Errors are frequent enough to occasionally cause strain for the reader.
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