Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph illustrates comparison of 4 asian countries whose population favours to live in cities from 1970 to 2040 alongwith prediction . name of the countries are Philippine , Malaysia , Thailand and Indonesia .
Overall as per the data shown in the graph Indonesia and Malaysia observe surge in the population which loves to live in the cities where as Thailand and Philippines reflect rise and fall in the presence of people in develop cities over the given period.
In 1970 data shows Malaysia had the second highly populated cities in the asia nearly 30 percent of its people lives in the cities .later it observe a substantial amount of imigration after 1990 as per the rate of increment in the migration it will lead to 80 % till 2040.Indonesia had considered to be the least dense populated cities in 1970 . After 2000 it observe a high migration from its people toward the cities . Ultimately it will have the second most populated cities in the asia till 2040.
Philippines and Thailand fluctuates in terms of the migration where as Philippines had the densier cities in the asian region in 1970 . However they observe a sudden rise and fall in migration from 1990 to 2010 . in Thailand people a steady rise in the cities population till 1990 and after 2020 while they maintain their population from 1990 to 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover all four countries and the time frame from 1970 to 2040, providing an overview and some specific data points. However, the interpretation of the data contains several inaccuracies. For instance, the student states that Philippines had the 'densier cities' in 1970 and that Malaysia had the second highly populated cities with nearly 30 percent, but some of the trend descriptions are confused, particularly regarding fluctuations. The overview is somewhat simplistic ('Indonesia and Malaysia observe surge... whereas Thailand and Philippines reflect rise and fall'), which does not fully capture the overall upward trajectories visible in all four countries. Consequently, the task is only partially satisfied, aligning with Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into four paragraphs, including an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs discussing the countries. However, logical progression is hindered by poor referencing and a lack of clear cohesive devices. Sentences are often abrupt and lack smooth transitions (e.g., 'In 1970 data shows... later it observe...'). Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is weak and repetitive ('cities', 'migration'). There is no clear overall progression linking the ideas together effectively, which places this aspect firmly in Band 5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, frequently misusing terms related to urbanization. For example, the student writes 'population favours to live in cities' instead of 'urban population' or 'percentage of urban residents', and confuses 'migration' with urbanization levels. Words like 'densier', 'imigration', and 'develop cities' show noticeable errors in word choice and spelling. Although meaning can generally be understood, the limited range and frequent lexical inaccuracies restrict the score to Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentences, but grammatical control is weak throughout the text. There are frequent errors in verb tense consistency, subject-verb agreement, and punctuation (e.g., 'Indonesia had considered to be', 'it observe a high migration', missing capitalizations, and stray spaces). Sentences often run together or lack necessary articles and prepositions. While some basic structures are correct, the high frequency of grammatical errors causes difficulty for the reader and prevents the writing from achieving a Band 6.
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