Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graphs illustrate the information about the percentage of the population living in Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
Overall, Malaysia has the highest percentage of total population.
To begin with line graphs, In 1970, the percentage of Philippines and followed by malaysia and indonesia was lowest. In 1980, Malasiya was rise and get approxmatly 40%.and other countries also climp up. In 2000, The percentage of Malaysia climbed up and Philippines was decline downwards. Indonesia was steady climb up. Similarly, In 2010, the population of thailand was steady and Philippines was the highest number of population percentage and followed by indonesia. However, Thiland was the lowest. Furthermore, In 2030, Phillippines will be remain highest and the population percentage of thailand remains lowest and second highest will be indonesia. Lastly, in 2040, The population percentage of malaysia will be at peak point and followed by indonesia and philippines and lowest will be thailand.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by mentioning all four countries and outlining some trends across the given time period. However, the response contains several inaccurate data readings and flawed comparisons, such as incorrectly stating that the Philippines or Thailand had the highest or lowest populations in various years when the graph shows otherwise (e.g., stating Malaysia will not be the highest in 2040 or misidentifying historical rankings). The overview is limited to a single sentence about Malaysia. Because the reporting of main features contains notable factual inaccuracies regarding the visual data and lacks a well-developed overall summary, this performance aligns with Band 5.0 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text lacks proper paragraphing, being broken only into short, disjointed sentences rather than a coherent structure of introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. Logical progression is frequently disrupted by abrupt transitions such as 'To begin with line graphs' and 'Furthermore'. While some basic cohesive devices are attempted, referencing and linking are often faulty or mechanical, making the flow difficult to follow. This reflects Band 4.5 to 5.0 characteristics, and a score of 5.0 is appropriate as there is a recognizable overall attempt to sequence time periods, even though progression is weak.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple verbs like 'rise', 'climb up', and 'decline'. There are notable spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'Malasiya', 'approxmatly', 'climp', and 'Thiland'. The range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for conveying basic trends, but lacks precision and flexibility. Uncommon lexical items are absent, and inaccuracies in spelling and word formation occur frequently. This places the response firmly within the Band 5.0 category.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response shows a limited range of grammatical structures. Attempts at complex sentences or future predictions (e.g., 'Phillippines will be remain highest') are frequently faulty. There are persistent errors in verb forms, prepositions, and sentence construction throughout the text (e.g., 'the percentage of Philippines and followed by malaysia and indonesia was lowest'). Simple sentences dominate, and grammatical errors cause frequent difficulty and confusion for the reader. These features correspond to a Band 5.0 score.
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