Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given line graphs depict the information about the percentile of the population living in cities between 1970 to 2040 years. From an overall analysis, it is vivdly manifested that the maximum percentage o population were in Malaysis whereas the minimum figure can be observed in the case of Thailand. Turnin into the details, it is evident that Tremendous increase can be witnessed in Malaysis it was noticed to 30% in 1970 year as it will reach at 80% in 2040 year. On the contrery, Indonesia and Philippiness population will living in cities by 60% and 50% in 2040 years respectively, Probing further, it will be interesting to note that in the case of Thailand it was recorded by 19% in 1970 year and it will be reach at 45% in 2040 year. compartively, In 2000 year , Thailand and Indonesia it was noticed at same point at 30%
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response covers the main features and trends of the provided graph, outlining the general progression of urban population percentages across the four countries from 1970 to 2040. An overview is present at the beginning, noting that Malaysia had the highest figures and Thailand the lowest. However, the response contains several inaccuracies in data interpretation and specific figures when compared to the source chart, such as misstating the 2040 projections for Indonesia and the Philippines. Furthermore, the length requirement of 150 words was narrowly missed, falling short by a single word at 149 words. Consequently, these data discrepancies and the under-length penalty limit the task achievement score to band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, attempting an introduction, an overview, and body details. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward formatting, broken spacing, and mechanical or misused cohesive devices such as 'Turnin into the details' and 'Probing further'. Referencing between sentences is sometimes unclear, and the overall arrangement lacks smooth transitions. While there is a basic structural framework, the flow is noticeably hindered by structural errors and abrupt shifts between ideas. This performance aligns best with the band 5 descriptors for coherence and cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student attempts a range of vocabulary relevant to the task, including words like 'percentage', 'population', 'predictions', and 'increase'. However, there are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'vivdly', 'manifested', 'Malaysis', 'Turnin', 'contrery', 'Philippiness', and 'compartively'. Word choice and collocations are often unnatural or incorrect, for instance writing 'percentile' instead of 'percentage' and 'population will living in cities' instead of 'population living in cities'. These noticeable lexical errors and spelling mistakes cause some difficulty for the reader, placing the response firmly at band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as missing prepositions, tense confusion between past trends and future predictions ('it was noticed to 30% in 1970 year as it will reach'), and severe subject-verb agreement issues ('Indonesia and Philippiness population will living'). Punctuation is also erratic, with multiple run-on clauses and missing commas. Because these frequent errors cause difficulty and strain comprehension, a band score of 5.0 is appropriate.
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