Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The line chart illustrates the proportion of individuals in different region of Asia which are living in the cities from 1970 to 2020 and give predictions for 2030 to 2040.
Overall, the percentage of individuals they are lived in cities of three countries Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia were rised throughout the period.and it will show the same pattern till 2040. In the contrast the ratio of Philppines is increased in first two decades and it declined in next twenty years but it again will grow in next two decades.
Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia shared the highest proportion of individuals they are lived in the cities respectivley
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, containing only 106 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. While the student attempts an overview by mentioning the upward trends in Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia alongside the fluctuating trend in the Philippines, the body paragraphs remain severely underdeveloped. The final sentence is cut off abruptly ("respetcivley"), preventing the student from reporting the main features or making meaningful comparisons as instructed. Based on these limitations, the score reflects a minimal attempt at the task.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The essay is divided into short paragraphs and attempts an overall summary, but logical progression breaks down due to the incomplete nature of the text. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes awkward, such as "In the contrast" instead of "In contrast". Referencing is occasionally confusing, and the abrupt end to the response significantly disrupts the structural flow. Although paragraphing is attempted, the lack of developed body paragraphs and poor sentence flow keep this criterion at a lower band.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, featuring frequent errors in word choice and morphology, such as "region" instead of "regions", "rised" instead of "rose", and "Philppines" (spelling). The student attempts some topic-related vocabulary like "proportion", "percentage", and "predictions", but the range is limited. Awkward phrasing, such as "individuals they are lived in cities", demonstrates a lack of control over collocation and word formation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, and attempts at complex sentences frequently result in major errors. Examples of severe grammatical inaccuracies include "the percentage of individuals they are lived in cities... were rised" and "the ratio of Philppines is increased in first two decades and it declined". Tense consistency is poorly handled, mixing past and future predictions incorrectly. Errors are frequent and occasionally obscure the intended meaning.
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