Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates th information about the percentage of population who living in cities of Phillippines, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia from 1970 to 2020 also anticipate about an upcomming the years for 2030 and 2040. The data is given in percentages.
Overall, All the countries showed an upward trend from 1970 to 2040. In malaysia, predicted more population will live in cities in 2040 while, there will less trend in Thailand as compared to other countriesto stay in cities.
At first glance, it is clear that in 1970, around 13% people lived in cities in Indonesia while almost 19% stayed in Thailand. In 2000, there was both remained same population situated at nearly 28%.However, it is predicted that in 2040, in Thailand 45% and in Indonesia 60% population will live in cities.
From further analysisi , it is clearly seen that Malaysia and Phillippines
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response is incomplete because it cuts off mid-sentence and fails to meet the 150-word minimum, containing only 145 words. Consequently, the report does not cover all countries adequately. While the student attempts an overview and mentions some trends and figures (e.g., 'In 1970, around 13% people lived in cities in Indonesia'), the abrupt ending prevents the full development of main features and comparisons. Because the task is cut short, Task Achievement cannot exceed Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response attempts to organise the information logically with an introductory paragraph, an overview, and body paragraphs. However, the cohesive devices used are sometimes mechanical or awkward (e.g., 'At first glance, it is clear that...'). Furthermore, the paragraphing is disrupted because the essay stops abruptly in the middle of a sentence at the end. While there is a discernible underlying structure, the lack of completion and poor linking severely limit overall coherence and cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is somewhat basic and repetitive ('population', 'live in cities', 'trend'). There are also noticeable lexical errors and spelling mistakes throughout the text, such as 'th information', 'Phillippines', 'upcomming', 'In malaysia', and 'analysisi'. While the student attempts some topic-specific terms like 'percentage' and 'predicted', the range is limited and frequent errors reduce the precision of the writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, and the attempts at complex sentences often contain severe errors. Examples include 'percentage of population who living in cities', 'predicted more population will live', and 'there will less trend in Thailand'. There are also capitalization issues ('malaysia') and incomplete sentence structures. Because the writing terminates mid-sentence at the very end, grammatical completion is also compromised.
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