Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph indicates the population of four Asian countries living in cites with there future predications.
The graph shows the population from 1970 to 2020 and also provides future predication for 2030 to 2040.
The graps presents the population of Indonesia,Thailand,Malaysia,Philippines.As in 1970 the least percentage of population living in cities were of Indonesia and after that it was of Thailand which was around 20% with time the increase in both countries population in cites in 2000 it reaches to around 25% and at that both the counties have same percentage of population in cites.After that the Population in cites of Indonesia have increased rapidly and in 2040 it will be more then Thailand and Malaysia.While in 2040 Thailand will have the lowest percentage among four countries.
In 1970 the percentage of Malaysia and Philippines was almost same with Phillppines as highest among four countries but the rapid increase in Malaysia population in cites reaches to 70% in 2020 and in future in 2040 it will be around 80% much higher then other three countries.
While the Philippines which was at top in 1970 will be the second lowest Population in cites which will be around 50%.
This graph indicates that the population cites in four asian countries will increase in future.With Malaysia at top in 2040 and Thailand will be at the lowest.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the main features of the graph, noting general trends such as the increase in urban population across all four countries and highlighting Malaysia's high future proportion. However, there are significant inaccuracies in reporting data points. For instance, the text claims that in 2040 Indonesia 'will be more then Thailand and Malaysia' and that Malaysia will be 'around 80% much higher then other three countries' while later stating Indonesia 'will be the second lowest'—which contradicts earlier statements and the visual data. The overview is weak and repetitive, and the selection of data points is sometimes confused, limiting the development of ideas to a Band 5 level.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response shows some attempt at organization, dividing the description into a brief introduction, body details, and a concluding summary. However, paragraphing is poorly handled, with a large, dense body paragraph containing multiple ideas lumped together without clear separation. Cohesive devices are repetitive or misused, and referencing is frequently unclear (e.g., 'at that both the counties have same percentage'). There is no clear overall progression of ideas, resulting in a disjointed reading experience that aligns with Band 5 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently reusing terms such as 'population', 'cites' (cities), and 'percentage'. There are several spelling mistakes ('cites' instead of cities, 'predications' / 'predication' instead of predictions, 'Phillppines') and word choice errors. While the writer attempts some topic-specific vocabulary, the range is limited and noticeable errors in word formation and collocation cause some difficulty for the reader, fitting a Band 5 profile.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response contains a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple or run-on sentences connected loosely by conjunctions. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('the least percentage of population... were of Indonesia') and prepositional errors. Punctuation is also weak, with missing commas and periods causing run-on clauses ('As in 1970 the least percentage... and after that it was...'). Because frequent errors cause difficulty and complex structures are largely absent or faulty, a score of 5.0 is appropriate.
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