Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The given line graph illustrate the portion of population who live in cities of four asian countries form 1970 to 20220. This graph also predict about percentage of people who will moves in urban cities from 2030 to 2040.
In 1970, only a few indonesian were live in urban area.However, there is dramtic increase in urbanization till 2020. Moreover, its marjority of population will move toward city in next two decades. The graph indicate that approximately half of the residents of Philippines were shift in metropolitan from 1970 to 1990. But, there was a slightly decline from 1990 to 2010 and havinfg a predicition approximately half of its population will move in the big cities till 2040.
Futhermore, about a quater of malaysian was lived in rural areas of malaysia. Nevertheless, a majoirity of malayias will move in cities till 2040.
Only a few portion of thailand popultion were lived in villages in 1970. However, the prediction show that half of the people of thailand will move toward cities in 2040.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by describing the trends for the four countries, mentioning figures such as 1970 and 2020. However, the response contains several inaccuracies and misinterpretations of the data (e.g., claiming that 'only a few indonesian were live' or stating that about half of the Philippines residents shifted in metropolitan from 1970 to 1990, when the actual figure was around 48% rising from 32%). Furthermore, the formatting contains typographical errors in the years ('20220'). While an overview is attempted, the lack of precision and misunderstanding of certain data points limit the development of the main features, placing this response at Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is divided into paragraphs, which helps establish a basic structure for different countries and periods. However, the overall progression is disjointed due to abrupt shifts between ideas and sentences. Cohesive devices are used mechanically or incorrectly (e.g., 'However, there is dramtic increase', 'Futhermore'). Referencing is sometimes unclear, and paragraphing is underdeveloped, with some paragraphs grouping disparate points together without smooth transitions. This reflects the characteristics of Band 5.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling mistakes throughout the text (e.g., 'illustrate' instead of 'illustrates', 'portion' instead of 'proportion', 'asian', 'form', '20220', 'predict', 'moves', 'dramtic', 'marjority', 'shift', 'havinfg', 'predicition', 'Futhermore', 'quater', 'majoirity', 'malayias', 'popultion'). There are very few attempts at less common vocabulary, and those attempted are inaccurate in form or collocation. This falls into Band 4.0 due to the high density of basic lexical and spelling errors that strain the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentences, but grammatical accuracy is very low. There are persistent errors in tense usage, subject-verb agreement, and word forms (e.g., 'indonesian were live', 'people who will moves', 'residents... were shift', 'malaysian was lived', 'popultion were lived'). Sentence structures are frequently faulty when attempting complexity, causing difficulty for the reader and impeding communication in several places. This corresponds to a Band 4.0 level.
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