Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Here,graph gives information about of the Population in four Asian nations living in Cities from 1970 to 2020,and analysis for 2030 and 2040 years.And,Toal People living in Cities are giving in Percentange and years are from 1970 to 2040 Shows in this graph.

Overall,It is noticeble that Malaysia in 1970 Pepole living in Cities of Anlaysis 2040 Shows that Population living in Cities are 85 Percentges Which are more Than any Conties . Where instend in Indonesia Population living Cities Prediction of Thailand Shows That in 2040 People living in Cities are very less Than any Counties .

A glance at the graph revels that in Malaysia Pepole of living Cities can Increace to 80 in 2040 but in back in time in Indonasia Population of living Cities are Just One Percentage less Than High Population of living Cities.

In , Where in Thailand Population of living in Cities Prediction Shows That Only 35 Perctange Which Very less Compare to another nations in also back in Time Populatio of living Just 15 Which are also less Than any Another Countries back In Time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response makes an attempt to discuss the graph, but it does so only minimally. It mentions some countries and numbers, such as Malaysia and Thailand in 2040, but the information reported is largely confused, inaccurate, and fails to give a clear overview of the main trends. The attempt to summarize the main features is hindered by disjointed phrasing, meaning that the overall task is only addressed in a very limited and tangential manner.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The information and ideas are not arranged coherently. Although the text is broken into short paragraph blocks, there is no clear logical progression or structure. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, with confusing transitional phrases like 'Where instend in' and 'In , Where in'. The relationship between sentences is frequently unclear, making it very difficult for the reader to follow any overall line of argument or description.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, relying heavily on words directly lifted or poorly copied from the prompt such as 'population', 'living', 'cities', and 'countries'. There are frequent errors in word choice, word form, and spelling, such as 'Toal', 'Percentange', 'noticeble', 'Anlaysis', 'Conties', 'instend', and 'revels'. These lexical inadequacies and frequent spelling mistakes often strain the reader and obscure the intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response features a very limited range of grammatical structures, and errors are frequent throughout. There are persistent issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'graph gives', 'Population ... are giving', and 'Pepole ... can Increace'. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are poorly handled, resulting in fragmented and malformed clauses that frequently distort the intended meaning and cause significant difficulty for the reader.

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